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A Tone of Voice
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0 posted 2003-01-21 11:52 PM


He likes the way her hair parts, the way it falls exposing her face
While the division remains mysteriously guarded by
Secrets she may tell, if the mood strikes
He thinks of her as he drives and the music plays
He likes the ways she sways, slow and deliberate richly aware
Of the stares she attracts
He likes the fact she is unencumbered by rules that rule,
He’s humbled by the special delivery, a heart
Minus pretenses and petty demands
She gives him reason to smile several times a day
She’s a blue diamond flame, the soft rain
An ethereal space that dominates
A voice that dictates, what he likes



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BluesSerenade
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1 posted 2003-01-22 12:04 PM


He likes the fact she is unencumbered by rules that rule,
He’s humbled by the special delivery, a heart

Hooray!!!  I like the rhythm in this and the way your words sway to their own Z step!

I do I do!!!



A Tone of Voice
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2 posted 2003-01-22 12:06 PM


smiling, you are such a dandy humdinger of a lady.....sincerely, thank you~!


~Atov (Z) *wink*

ShadowRider
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3 posted 2003-01-22 12:53 PM


A very subtle rhythm, like a windblown sway, makes the point in the same manner as the subject.  Only you could describe a 'sway' in such a way it describes also a whim.
Extremely cool, AToV. ~smiling at ya~
Jeff

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-01-22 03:58 AM


smiling here...I know a man like this
Salty
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5 posted 2003-01-22 11:17 AM


and I like the way this reads....soft...swaying to the music.  

Very sexy images going on here.


~Salty

Connel
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6 posted 2003-01-22 11:26 AM


lol... good poem.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Enchantress
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7 posted 2003-01-22 11:31 AM


Oooh I love the rhythm here!
Sways so sensually!
Much enjoyed...the sway..er, poem.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

A Tone of Voice
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8 posted 2003-01-22 01:07 PM


ShadowRider

A very subtle rhythm, like a windblown sway, makes the point in the same manner as the subject.  

Atov -----> Thank you kind sir, I'm glad you enjoyed the ~sway~!

passing shadows

smiling here...I know a man like this


Atov------>  well I hope he knows how to keep his sway in tip top shape....*grin* thank you passing shadows for reading, and commenting.....*S*



Salty
and I like the way this reads....soft...swaying to the music.  

Very sexy images going on here.


Atov-----> Why thank you Ms. Salty for your comment, we like to sway in Texas~! *grin*


Connel
lol... good poem.

Atov-----hey Connel, thank you~



Enchantress

Oooh I love the rhythm here!
Sways so sensually!
Much enjoyed...the sway..er, poem.
~Hugs~


Atov----> and I enjoyed your comment, very much, smiling here, Thank you Enchantress~!
  


    

Mistletoe Angel
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9 posted 2003-01-22 11:40 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is so sensually beautiful, sweet friend, I always smile when I see a girl smile and happily dancing, as every girl should feel special and sway with her heartbeat! (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, speaking of swaying, I am seeing my favorite artist...Shakira...next week in concert, and she is talented at dancing too to her music, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie
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10 posted 2003-01-22 11:45 PM


AToV...can't help but say I too like the rhythm, feels so right.  Enjoyed!
garysgirl
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11 posted 2003-01-23 01:48 AM


Hey Lady, this one makes you feel like getting up and swaying...er, I mean dancing around the room......
inkedgoddess
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12 posted 2003-01-23 06:58 AM




i could feel his pull towards her, finding her within the subtleties throughout the day
very well writtten

Professor Gloom
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13 posted 2003-01-24 08:55 AM


Upon the bench within the park
The watches dressed complete in dark
Sees as brisk wind whirls the dirt
Catches hair and flutters skirt
Youthful beauty strolls his way
Poetry in motion within her sway.

Gloom

Sunshine
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14 posted 2003-01-24 11:16 AM



This is a blue diamond poem.
Enjoyed it Very Much!

A Tone of Voice
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15 posted 2003-01-24 09:42 PM


Mistletoe Angel, what a true sweetheart you are, thank you thank you thank you~!!

~ATov


Martie, I'm glad you enjoyed the rhythm, it's good to sway every now and then~! *wink*

~Atov

garysgirl, oh, I LOVE the dancing uh, lady.....wow, so cute, and thank you dear lady for your kind words!

~Atov

inkedgoddess, what can I say, but thanks a huge heap~  *smile*


~Atov


Professor Gloom, for someone who deals in a life without smiles, you certainly gave me one~! thanks you~!


~Atov


Sunshine, your picture is the epitome of "sunshine" OH MY, what a SMILE~! Thank you!

~Atov


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