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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-01-21 04:51 AM


rest easy
whisper
foggy eyes
inhale this
make it memory
breathe me
play me
on twin screen
as I kiss
the lids' repose
tracing
finger
under lip
nuzzle
wet
beneath
your ear
slowly
softly
succulent--
worship
that
you'll never see.


I chisel you
in memory's keep--
knowing now,
why God counts hairs.




© Copyright 2003 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
GG
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1 posted 2003-01-21 07:21 AM


this is quite brilliant if I may say so myself.
Creative view and enjoyed.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2003-01-21 07:50 AM


I chisel you
in memory's keep--
knowing now,
why God counts hairs.
==========================


*smiling at you*

"counting hairs" ... yer so kewl

moth memories...me fav kind

I was reborn on the shores of the Chesapeake Bay
Virginia hasn't yet faded away
I keep thinking tomorrow is coming today
So I am endlessly waiting

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2003-01-21 08:32 AM


ah....you always amaze me...and always for different reasons.( chuckling) This...I think I will keep...


Temptress
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4 posted 2003-01-22 12:05 PM



~~I Love You~~

Nan
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5 posted 2003-01-22 10:09 AM


You do have an interesting vantage point here, serene one - Velly, velly intellesting indeed...
Nightshade
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just out of reach
6 posted 2003-01-22 10:13 AM


serenity - Wow, I am keeping this one for sure. This is simply wonderful!! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Sunshine
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7 posted 2003-01-22 10:16 AM



God's not done
counting yours...

Excellent!

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2003-01-22 10:16 AM


serenity,
"I chisel you
in memory's keep." That I do.

Cerenity
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9 posted 2003-01-22 10:21 AM


Hi Sweeyie,

Definitely a awesome one to start the morning off with,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



serenity blaze
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10 posted 2003-01-22 11:13 AM


startled a bit?

Nan is doing Colonel Clink (sp?) imitations?

grin...

gotta love it.

Thanks all...and I don't mind the counting hairs bit, as long as they are counted from my head and not the sink.

Hugs and love to you all...

and WHOA. SISTER CERENITY!!! WELCOME HOME LOVELY ONE!!!

Connel
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11 posted 2003-01-22 11:29 AM


Cool... Enjjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-01-22 12:14 PM


Karen, I  really like this one.
It's a   

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Mistletoe Angel
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13 posted 2003-01-22 11:49 PM




(smiles) This is beautiful, sweet friend, a whisper is just a pitch above inaudible yet it speaks with the best clarity of all, yay, I love it! (big hugggssssssss) I love your style, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie
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14 posted 2003-01-23 12:03 PM


hi serenity...sometimes it's the smallest gesture that means the most..yes?  

[This message has been edited by Martie (01-23-2003 12:07 AM).]

passing shadows
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15 posted 2003-01-23 03:05 AM


I cna't even think of a word...just know that i love this, and the last stanza is awesome!
Kielo
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16 posted 2003-01-23 06:53 PM


*grin*

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

vlraynes
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17 posted 2003-01-23 10:18 PM



Karen~
I'm smiling and loving this one.
You're just too cool.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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