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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2003-01-20 10:32 PM



This path of here and now to choose
This greatest climb to win or lose
In different text desire and need
Into the well this wish concede

This might or fate another time
This life to reckon of the rhyme
Before these eyes a single sight
Into the well bleeds out by right

This dialogue or silent thought
This deepest want embraced and fought
Before the swell of muted sound
Into the well by heart be bound

Copyright Kkh 1/20/03

© Copyright 2003 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-01-20 11:10 PM


This is so beautiful. I loved it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Duncan
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2 posted 2003-01-20 11:13 PM


This dialogue or silent thought
This deepest want embraced and fought
Before the swell of muted sound
Into the well by heart be bound

Damn, I like that.

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3 posted 2003-01-20 11:41 PM




(sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, just throw a coin in there and though it is not for sure a wish is always worth trying! (big hugggssssss) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kathleen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

ShadowRider
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4 posted 2003-01-20 11:46 PM


I really liked the Poe-ish repetition patterns in this:  almost like a poetic chant.
Cast a pebble, and make the wish
before the splash. . .
JkF

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