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Sweetpoet16m4u04
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since 2002-11-10
Posts 153
Ma, U.S.A

0 posted 2003-01-20 07:46 PM



Let Me Be The Oneā€¦.

Let me be the one to hold you,
When tears fill your eyes.
Let me be the one to tell you the truth,
When you are surrounded by lies.

Let me be the one to miss you,
When we are apart.
Let me be the one to love you,
With all my heart.
Let me be the one to show you the true meaning of love,
To death causes us to become apart.

Let me be the one that shows you,
What it is that you do to me?
Let me be the one to bring you,
On a magic carpet ride over the graceful blue sea.

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Miah
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since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2003-01-20 09:03 PM


This is a lovely write.  Love is something we not only want but something we want to give.  

[This message has been edited by Miah (01-20-2003 09:04 PM).]

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
2 posted 2003-01-21 07:43 PM


made me sigh happy
'tis beautiful

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2003-01-23 10:38 PM


Thanks for warming my heart on a day I truly needed it. Wonderful poem!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2003-01-24 02:01 AM


Enjoyed...James
passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-01-24 04:05 AM


flows well, nice imagery...good write
kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
6 posted 2004-01-20 11:03 PM



Let me be the one to bring you,
On a magic carpet ride over the deep blue  
sea!!

I loved your poem, especially these lines. Its like a fairy tale!(aladdin) I love it! hehe. Im not sure if i got the two lines totally right, i am not the greatest at remembering things! lol. Cant wait to see more!!!
~kissa~

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