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winston
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since 2002-12-19

Posts 204
NW of Eden

0 posted 2003-01-20 12:19 PM

Babylon boasted but one tower;
here hundreds reach through haze
towards an attainable heaven.

But who needs God where Mammon
lays every hill and mountain low,
makes every rough place plain?

Yet even here temples squat
cowering between skyscrapers.
Incense sweetens the traffic fumes.

II

Rolling on the floor like a drunk,
a legless man rattles his tin.

Commuters flow round him, over him,
as a tide round a rock - relentlessly.

III

Over land and sea
haze, hiding distant mountains,
shrouds a bleak future.

Men, busy as ants,
eyes fixed on the task at hand,
ignore horizons.

IV

The bronze Buddha on the mountain sits
massively. His sightless eyes are fixed
on a far horizon. If the mist should clear
his view would be of calm waters where
ships ride at anchor and at rest.

Believers and non-believers, pilgrims, stream,
like termites towards honey, upwards, swarm
briefly and unnoticed round his feet,
then stream down again. What sweet
plunder do they carry to the nest?

Beyond the ships, what is it that he sees?
What prospect holds that level gaze?
Could he discern them through the haze?
The slim towers of the city rise
and, aspiring to a rival heaven, are blessed.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2003-01-20 02:59 PM

Very well written, Winston! I enjoyed this very much!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-01-20 03:20 PM

winston
What brew simmers in the pot, Could it be the horizon? Enjoyed

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2003-01-20 04:24 PM

A glimpse. Enjoyed and felt I was viewing it through your eyes. References to the ants and termites reminds me of dense population, but a determination to work and be productive. Interesting.

Thank you, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

winston
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 204
NW of Eden

4 posted 2003-01-20 05:37 PM

Thanks Denise, Seymour Tabin,
regards2you - I appreciate your perceptiveness.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2003-01-20 06:48 PM

(big huggssssssss) This is beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry to see the towers stretch to the heavens and like an obelisk reflect the light of the golden sun! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Winston, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-01-21 01:48 AM

Winston, this is very well done. I enjoyed reading it.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

7 posted 2003-01-21 09:58 PM

hey, this is hot! the title is kind of strange, but that's okay!~ peace! i like the horizons, the vast scope of the poem.

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

8 posted 2003-01-21 10:03 PM

rrrrriiiiggghhht..... Hong kong eh? lol... Good poem.. thankyas for sharing.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2003-01-21 10:04 PM

god, how i wish you mispeld sumthing, here!
no such luk

winston
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 204
NW of Eden

10 posted 2003-01-23 08:23 AM

Thanks
MistleToe
garysgirl
GOIDsparkIESS - title is so because that's where I went on vacation in 1996.
Connel - you sound surprised by something. What is it?
inkedgoddess - my dear Brooklyn beauty, don't forget am only human, so, maybe, one of these days you might (just might

) find a typo in my post as well as my reply.

Thanks.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

mirror man
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since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

11 posted 2003-01-23 09:33 AM

Very descriptive and thought provoking. Meditative, as the Buddha is. And like the Buddha, much ignored. That is, the Buddha as meditation and introspection. Enjoyed this.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

12 posted 2003-01-23 09:44 AM

like this..the structure and the thought process lend a feel to it that adds to the scenes painted with your words..

good stuff...and I make typos all the time.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

13 posted 2003-01-23 05:07 PM

i'm only human
i'm only human
i'm only human
i'm only human
i'm only human
................was that the one you planted?

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

14 posted 2003-01-24 02:18 AM

Enjoyed...James

winston
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since 2002-12-19

Posts 204
NW of Eden

15 posted 2003-01-24 12:01 PM

Thanks
mirror man,
Cpat Hair,
inkedgoddess - in this concrete jungle, you can't plant trees, let alone anything else.

JamesMichael.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

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