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Duncan
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0 posted 2003-01-18 11:54 PM



My hand holds the pen
much as it did

when the nights were warm
and starless
and I could
will moments into being

Yet tonight
the pen is simply heavy

© Copyright 2003 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
Souls Shadow
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1 posted 2003-01-18 11:56 PM


"when the nights were warm
and starless
and I could
will moments into being"

breathless...

Aenimal
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2 posted 2003-01-18 11:59 PM


absolutely brilliant post, some nights the muses bless and others curse this night however you are blessed

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (01-18-2003 11:59 PM).]

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2003-01-19 12:20 PM


and I could
will moments into being

============================

you aint heavy...youre me mothy brother

I was reborn on the shores of the Chesapeake Bay
Virginia hasn't yet faded away
I keep thinking tomorrow is coming today
So I am endlessly waiting

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2003-01-19 12:31 PM


What a striking little write!
Brilliant is quite right. ThisDiamond

Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 2003-01-19 04:30 AM




(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Duncan, this pen here too can still write eloquently than ever but it is also so gray! (sad sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-01-19 04:35 AM


I understand...chin up!
Severn
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7 posted 2003-01-19 05:34 AM


D!

This is grand, grand I say...

Holds the mood...creates the moment...

doing that hand-kissing gesture that means perfection in Italy or whatever it is lol..

exceeeeeeeeeept...

my one criticism - I'd drop the 'simply'...reads much tighter without it..

great stuff you

K

Sunshine
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8 posted 2003-01-19 05:36 AM



...so I'm glad you grabbed a pencil.
Don't you know I know
the feel of this...

Well done, Sir!


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-19-2003 06:41 PM).]

Titia Geertman
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9 posted 2003-01-19 06:26 AM



Long or short, your words give always pleasure to one's mind.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2003-01-19 09:22 AM


Heavy, but not full.
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2003-01-19 10:05 AM


Duncan
Get another bottle of ink. LOL Very good.

winston
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12 posted 2003-01-19 11:32 AM


Thank you, Duncan, and your keyboard.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. (unaware that a live television camera w

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