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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-01-18 12:30 PM



Quiet

Perhaps it was because
she was too ill to hold me,
those first months,
that before the first cry
of my awake,
he would come, and lift me,
holding me quietly…

later,

in the middle of my youth,
I knew when he knew that
it was time for us to do our morning dance,
he would quietly fix the coffee,
and I his toast,
he would boil the eggs,
I would bring the dishes to table

the silent waltz
of father/daughter.

Sleepy heads missed the unfolding
golden mornings,
they missed the kiss of fog on roses,
and the brush of the hummingbird wings
that would visit,
he and I

in the quiet.

Perhaps it is because
in his ill I held him last,
as the early morning rise of sun
brought to the morning fog
a glint of the mystic
that would stay
even though
he would
not fix
coffee

again.

I rise
each morning
to the quiet sounds
of remembering,

smelling deep
the liquid warm
of yesterday’s hot coffee
and hearing yet
the golden quiet
and hushing
sweep

of hummingbird wings.


Love, Karilea


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1 posted 2003-01-18 12:38 PM


you touch so deeply. Now I am crying. Huge heart hugs to you. I will be calling my dad tonight....
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2 posted 2003-01-18 12:41 PM


me oh my....I just felt the fluttering of angels and butterflies ....

and Ms K? where was the tissue warning my dear?

The picture is priceless..the poem did it more than justice.

It's over long before her fall from grace, she's never been this far from safe.
Trying to see where it all began, she'll never be the same again.

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3 posted 2003-01-18 12:41 PM


"I rise
each morning
to the quiet sounds
of remembering,

smelling deep
the liquid warm
of yesterday’s hot coffee
and hearing yet
the golden quiet
and hushing
sweep

of hummingbird wings."
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May I please have a tissue?
Beautiful...the love between a father/daughter.
So wonderfully told here Karilea...
Very very special this write...yes it is.
I only wish I could express my feelings or a moment so well,
in writing, about my dearly departed father.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Kellie_Cantrell
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4 posted 2003-01-18 01:02 PM


so sweet and caring, on hummingbird wings
passing shadows
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Denise
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6 posted 2003-01-18 02:02 PM


Those are beautiful rememberings to cherish always, Karilea! (((HUGS)))
Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-01-18 02:17 PM


Very touching and beautiful, thanks for opening up and sharing
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8 posted 2003-01-18 02:30 PM


I rise
each morning
to the quiet sounds
of remembering,

smelling deep
the liquid warm
of yesterday’s hot coffee


My Grandmother...and the smell of toast.  Thanks for reminding me.

GG
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9 posted 2003-01-18 03:49 PM


y'know, its hard to get tears to my eyes...

It can be easier to try to forget things...
But I still always wait for 'her' to wake me up with singing... *sigh* :-/

anyway.. out of that world...I enjoyed this.. next time tell me to get a tissue first.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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10 posted 2003-01-18 04:06 PM


This is touching beyond belief. But where just where did you warn us it was going to be a 'tissue needer?'

If we traveled backwards, from end to beginning, would the road, I wonder
Be the road we traveled from beginning to end?   ©das



Martie
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11 posted 2003-01-18 04:29 PM


Karilea--Sometimes we are blessed with memories so sweet that to write about them is near impossible, but not for you.  
Kethry
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12 posted 2003-01-18 10:15 PM


I agree with the others this was definitely a tissue warning poem, *Sniff, *HuGS.
Keth.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Bridget Shenachie
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13 posted 2003-01-19 10:35 PM


Loved the picture, my friend.  You have been beautiful all of your life, and this love has made you so!

Shenachie

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14 posted 2003-01-19 10:45 PM


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garysgirl
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15 posted 2003-01-19 10:47 PM


Dear sweet Karilea, since I've been here I've heard (read) you say over and over again that the writer is always supposed to warn when a tissue is needed....

You didn't warn, so I had to stop before I finished reading to get one....

This one made me want to call my Daddy, but I'm afraid they're already gone to bed....

The poem and picture were beautiful, Lady....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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