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ecrivan
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0 posted 2003-01-16 11:41 PM



If I could spot what omnipotence would
dots might then rise from circle centers
and if those curved form blossomed into spheres
would I be afflicted with dimensional fears?

what of the knot that lies all flat
could be untied if lifted like that
as higher dimensions view visceral insides
peruse interior rooms,the cache they hide.

would such beings have bags of skin
would they hold organs passed onto kin
and the powers that would arise
imagination yearns to recognize.



[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-17-2003 11:11 AM).]

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christian
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1 posted 2003-01-17 12:25 PM



you talk like an english professor,
your language carries baggage. and
honestly, i can't really grasp the meaning
but, you talk like an english
professor and your language carries
baggage. the good kind.


passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-01-17 04:41 AM


chris, it's just the way this wonderful poet is...deep and intellectual....sometimes above our heads...I often think of College Lit class and studying the great poets when I read Martin's work.

A thing to be proud of!

enchantingvamp
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3 posted 2003-01-17 04:51 AM


Well I for one enjoyed it, note that I had to go grab the dictionary to wrap my mind around some of the context and concepts, but once I reread it I enjoyed it even more, fabulous man.

Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell

Nan
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4 posted 2003-01-17 08:21 AM


I had to read through twice - My kind of poem, ecrivan... I particularly like the vision created in the first stanza... Nice write - Nice to see you posting..
ecrivan
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5 posted 2003-01-17 11:15 AM


Chris,

One does collect baggage in life, some carry it forward others leave theirs at railway stations looking for someone else to carry it..I rather like carrying my own baggage. By the way I am an English prof.


ecrivan
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6 posted 2003-01-17 11:19 AM


Passing Shadows,

Now you're flattering me..the great poets??..I just try to be myself. Sometimes I am sad that sometimes the words I use are above the heads of some.


ecrivan
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7 posted 2003-01-17 11:23 AM


Enchanting vamp,

thanks for sharing...using words you are not familiar with helps the reader to get a crisper meaning I find, and as you can those words are available to everybody.

Nan,

thanks for sharing..don't have as much time as I did but will post now and then.


JamesMichael
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8 posted 2003-01-21 12:58 PM


Nice flow of words...James
passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-01-21 04:05 AM


don't be sad, it's quite a gift! and challenging, might I add
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10 posted 2003-01-21 05:39 AM


Words I love they are my favourites tools and my best friends (sad I know) you use them well I love the language of physics especialy spacial descriptions hold such beautiful power.  Much enjoyed

Take a good look at my face
Well, don't my smile look out of  place
look a little closer its easy to trace
The tracks of my tears

ecrivan
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11 posted 2003-01-21 11:13 AM


Hello Walter,

the workings of the mind and how it sees space has interested me for some now. Thanks for sharing

ecrivan
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12 posted 2003-01-21 11:18 AM


Passing Shadow,

you're right on that I should be happy with the gift of insight and that's it.
along with knowing comes the despair at being
alone with ones thoughts..that has been the case before and is the same today.


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