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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-01-15 06:31 AM



Looking Through Another's Eyes

quote:
Contentment

Yes, there is a Nirvanah;
it is leading your sheep
to a green pasture,
and in putting your child to sleep,
and in writing the last line of your poem.

-Kahlil Gibran


I would find Nirvanah
for although I have not one sheep,
I do have one green pasture
and in that pasture I would seek
Nirvanah

I would find heaven's door
in that green pasture
where a child lays in slumber
though not guarding one sheep,
in Nirvanah

Where is your Nirvanah?
Indeed, is it in writing the
last line to your poem?
And did you sweat and toil
and trouble yourself so?

Or is it only a rambling of
words that will not give
meaning nor pleasure,
and shame may come of it,
in Nirvanah?

When my time comes, and
I would dwell in the place
of Nirvanah, if I may but
grace Him and share with Him
my toil of words,

I will then be in Nirvanah.

~*~

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
22 July 2000


© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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1 posted 2003-01-15 06:54 AM


And Nirvanah will be in you Kari, thoughtful poem. You did the words of the prophet proud.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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2 posted 2003-01-15 07:33 AM


Very nicely done,
One comment,
You might add the in to the last line of the first stanza
in Nirvanah
just because it fits well and is the way the other last lines go.
Very minor point to a excellent poem

Gloom

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3 posted 2003-01-15 08:33 AM


The poem seems to excel its source of inspiration that is the quotation. As I read it, I felt a sense of clarity and steadiness in it. Thanks.
I've just found out that a Nirvanin is one has been "emancipated from the anxiety of re-birth." Interesting...

"am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak

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4 posted 2003-01-15 08:52 AM


It is in that fleeting place of "no thought".

I think.



(and hey, I'm giving the McKuen a second try. Just because I love ya! )

Enjoyed my little loll in the sun here, kari.

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5 posted 2003-01-15 08:54 AM


Extremely beautiful piece of work Karilea.
What beautiful words to awaken to this morning.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Nan
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6 posted 2003-01-15 09:40 AM


...and the Sun shall shine brilliantly there...

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7 posted 2003-01-15 09:46 AM


Beautiful...simply beautiful!!

believe in what your heart feels...

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8 posted 2003-01-15 09:59 AM


Karilea - what a perfectly enjoyable piece to read this morning. Wonderful. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-01-15 10:03 AM


Karilea,
Beautiful and may you reach your nirvana.


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10 posted 2003-01-15 10:49 AM




             

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11 posted 2003-01-15 12:33 PM


you always make me think deeper than I would just going on about my day without your writing
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12 posted 2003-01-15 07:03 PM


enjoyed
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13 posted 2003-01-15 07:33 PM


Beautiful, Karilea! Lovely thoughts!
Paul Wilson
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14 posted 2003-01-15 07:58 PM


Karilea~ A peaceful place for the soul to rest in your Nirvanah. Enjoyed very much...Paul

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