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Crossing Failure
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Crossing Failure |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Norton’s Ford lies just below Stillman’s where the river Turns in a long series Of flat stone riffles Then runs through Prarie Hollow. It isn’t much Just a flat slab of limestone Where the bank is not so steep That you can’t drive a Team across to the other side. Not any teams around these days But you can still manage a truck From one side to the other After you navigate the ruts In red clay that used to be Farmer’s road. We put in our canoes there And paddled upstream To float back down in lazy Side to side sweeps While taking in the sun And a few beers I remember the fires Built to give light more than heat But they helped keep The rising fog off us Until later when we would roll ourselves Into each other and create Currents of our own You can still cross the river there But we haven’t crossed paths Since that summer the rain failed And so did the seed of love planted in early spring |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is excellent! *S* You capture so well the changes in both the landscape and the lives, progress and the lack thereof. *S* I enjoyed this snapshot very much! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you ma'am... glad you enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh wow!! As always a fantastic story with terrific imagery!! Dang!! You are so good!!! ~Smiles & Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nancy... thank you..but they are for the most part just a mix of places I have seen and spent time..wrapped around some story line.... heck.. girls never paid me much mind...and even fewer of them that might have ever spent any time with me... I have what you call an active imaagination  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
We put in our canoes there And paddled upstream To float back down in lazy Side to side sweeps While taking in the sun And a few beers I remember the fires Built to give light more than heat But they helped keep The rising fog off us Until later when we would roll ourselves Into each other and create Currents of our own I've never really cared much if your stories were true or not. I just like hearing them. I write much the same way, bits and pieces of life strung together into (hopefully) poetic moments. Loved it...as always. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
..in that case, I love your imagination!  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Duncan: thank you sir..and believe me the stories you weave are poetic. nancy... thank you ma'am |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
I thought this was absolutely beautiful.....I felt like I was right there near that river, knowing love, freedom, and then slowly, ever so slowly I actually felt it slipping away....must add this to my fav list... Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you ...glad you enjoyed.. river can be a special place...for love and for finding yourself... |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Like the other, Capt. Ron, I love reading your stories, whether real or imaginary.........the reader not being able to distinguish is what makes a good writer......Agree?? You're good, Sir....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
I know those roads you speak of.. After you navigate the ruts In red clay that used to be Farmer’s road. It's amazing how someone's words can take you to a familar place. Loved the story of romance dancing through innocence of a past memory. (real or not) It speaks to you. Enjoyed this very much sir. ~Salty |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ethel.. thank you ma'am... there is truth in most all the stories I tell... I'm just not telling how much.  Salty... anyone that has been on those roads remembers them..and there are thousands of them stretching even more miles. Glad you enjoyed... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ron, This is soft spoken to point capturing a quiet joy with that river of yours; can hear it, feel it, breath it. It has a subtle rhythm that is so soothing, and even the ending has a calm, though sad acceptance as I see the character go off in the sunset being okay with all. Nice! Enjoyed. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - a great tale of love lost... BC |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Ron, this was fantastic. Nothing like a good story round a campfire on a cold night! Hon, I really felt I knew this place and longed to go back there! Hugs, Marti Most of us go to our grave |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nonsense, Ron, (on girls having not paid you much mind) - I don't believe THAT for one second. No sireeeeeee. Another lovely poem, a gentle stream that turns rapidly into falls. Cor |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Ron, there are always so many lost horizons and unclaimed territories and I only wishn one could share a flag to settle the rights of the purchase! (sigh) This is very poignant, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Until later when we would roll ourselves Into each other and create Currents of our own ======================== the moth is smiling, smiling, smiling... you always do this...and do it so well... those certain lines that just catches the reader and takes them back to a place and time in their life and you make even the pain worth remembering. oh and clever title btw  It's over long before her fall from grace, she's never been this far from safe. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hmmmm....*smiling*...what a story! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes what seems to be an easy crossing point becomes one of the most difficult... Yet still traversable if we set our minds to it... Great write, Cap'n.. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I'm very impressed with the way you weave a tale in verse...you create through expression images I see clearly...and emotions I feel.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
nice story weaving...sigh...rivers and love huh? musta been my problem, I grew up in a desert...not very much of either to be found.... |
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