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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2003-01-14 07:24 AM



"What a piece of work is man! How noble in reason! how infinite in faculties! in form and moving, how express and admirable! in action how like an angel! in apprehension, how like a god! the beauty of the world! the paragon of animals! And yet, to me, what is this quintessence of dust? Man delights not me; no, nor woman neither, though by your smiling you seem to say so."
W.Shakespeare, Hamlet

Build her as noble,
Mix water and dust to clay,
Form if you’re able
In woman’s delighting way.

Make it entice lust
With the curves and moving sway,
Tint with Earth tones and pieces of the sky,
More than mold of simple clay,
And yet what is it to this aging eye,
This piling of dust.

Then her voice does sing,
Nightingales pause to listen,
Perchance to learn a new beautiful lilt,
See the smile and hair glisten,
Oh what wonder from clay built,
What joy that form brings.

From earth’s kiln fire,
Baked to heaven’s perfection,
To gather glad glances as dancing by,
Elicit strong emotion
Of man desire.

But not these old eyes,
Though touched by sight lovely,
Tears not and yet cries,
Dust formed not for her beauty.

She leaves with the dawn of day,
Lost to sight never to stay.

Gloom


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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2003-01-14 08:16 AM


Gloom, good write.  Indeed...some things never stay, and aren't meant too either I guess.  
Nan
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2 posted 2003-01-14 08:42 AM


A bittersweet write, PG.. Your words do have a resolute sadness about them.. Nicely done...
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2003-01-14 08:46 AM


Professor,
How does a flower say sorry?

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon
4 posted 2003-01-14 09:15 AM


Hi Gloomy

I've missed reading your special form of poetry. It's nice to read your dark thoughts again.

enchantingvamp
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5 posted 2003-01-14 02:33 PM


This has everything in it that turns my crank, its sad, bit dark, I'm thinking regretful, just a tad.....llluuuuvvvvved it.

Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell

garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-01-14 02:38 PM


Prof., I never cease to be amazed by the way you weave the words together to form beautiful poetry......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

RSWells
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7 posted 2003-01-14 02:50 PM


"Come not, when I am dead,
   To drop thy foolish tears upon my grave,
To trample round my fallen head,
And vex the unhappy dust thou wouldst not save"
            -Tennyson 1842

You have my vote
this shroud of lonely motes
the fearful passages we quote
and the longing attitude emote
           -RSWells 2003

regards2you
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8 posted 2003-01-14 07:40 PM




I absolutely love this. All I can say.


Warm regards, Pat

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passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2003-01-15 03:18 AM


"nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost
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