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Open Poetry #24

Tommorrow

Ada'doLisdo'ti
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since 2002-12-10

Posts 123
California

0 posted 2003-01-13 01:38 PM

Lost in the light of this new tomorrow.
Bought with such pain and sorrow.
I can't find my way to the future planned.
All my dreams have been damned.

Don't no if I can find my way.
But I try one more day.
To find a path to borrow
In this new tomorrow.

The light at last has grown dim.
I search for someone to befriend.
We laugh and we play.
Then they go away.

Tired of trying to find my way.
Don’t want to face another day.
These paths lead only to sorrow.
So much for this bright tomorrow.

Mind made I climb high in the sky to reach the sun.
Say my peace and jump off the edge, I‘m done.
Floating weightless I see the world before me.
Like some sickly sweet dream...

Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence the most.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-01-14 07:13 AM

Heavy use of metaphor...this is not an easy theme, and your mind, and pen, did a good job!

enchantingvamp
Member

since 2002-12-21

Posts 214
Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas!

2 posted 2003-01-14 02:16 PM

Agrees with Sunshine on this one, throughly enjoyed.

Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2003-01-14 06:47 PM

Really enjoyed reading this...James

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