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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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If you look closely you can tell she’s not all that well… A double dose of reality each waking day keeps her hope from becoming feverishly high. She mixes her own novocain for her heart-crushed bitters and tarnish. It goes down hard but the numbness she finds necessary. She balances the concoction she downs with a little one, the color of sunshine, who seems to make it all worth while. Liquid energy is consumed cup after cup, it is required to keep her upright until it darkens into what has never been right when she swallows another- this time its pink- but color matters not- once inside it puts the black back into the night. If you timed it just right and slipped in between her blinks you could see that she’s not well, but what is more apparent than that is that she’s got what it takes to hide it. [This message has been edited by jellybeans (01-14-2003 03:22 PM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I liked this little "pharmacopia". This "Day in the life" This "Mothers' little helper" This all too real glimpse at an all too real person. ~wranx |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
no..I would say she is not too well at all, but I question how well she hides it too.... very well done my friend...well done indeed. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I cannot argue what Wranx told you. This is good. and yep, it is real too. Too real!!! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very good write. Enjoyed this. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, jellybeans, this does seem REAL..........TOO real!!!! "Love makes the world go around" |
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DonFurr Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 172Monticello IN |
It sounds as if her only cure is freedom. Great write here "If there is any doubt about it there is no doubt about it." Linnie Stanton |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
JB, Oh, sad....if this is you, please be careful...I'm glad you shared it here, so it's not hiding anymore I'm trying hard not to say more.... Hugs to you and if this is ~real~ may you soon find strength to deal with this heartache and ability to set it aside. though I understand sometimes we need to medicate...(actually, though many, many years ago, I have been there, and you name it, it was prescribed for me) The best cure for me was getting rid of my husband...magically, I needed to no more meds...funny how that works, though this is no laughing matter. The help of a wise friend or therepist is important, too. I so enjoy your talented writing.... it is part of you... God bless and give you what you need. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
i adored the last two lines, reminds me of me...yeah i went to a shrink but i decided i was cured..... Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
Yes... she hides it well... very very good, jb... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
A double dose of reality each waking day keeps her hope from becoming feverishly high. She mixes her own novocain for her heart-crushed bitters and tarnish. It goes down hard but the numbness she finds necessary. I tried to write something very similar to this recently. Reading this...I think I'll start over.  Damn real. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very sad write |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I liked it before, but like the edits very much, lady... thanks for making it more blonde-friendly. *S* I'm no doctor... but it seems this life needs a lot more of those sunshine colors and a lot less stress. *S* Wishing you peace and sending you hugs... and admiration for another great write. *S* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is so darned sad..yet so real it's frightening. Excellent write! ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wranx, thank you…have had a cold and have felt especially ‘medicated’ lately lol, thank you again cpat…well, if I could just silence this dang pen I could hide it better magnus, thank you the honesty of poetry is one of the things I love about itnightshade, thanks glad you enjoyed gg…thank you lady…lots of us understand this sort of life Don, you are probably right…that is one of my internal struggles…you will find the ‘freedom’ theme throughout my writings…sigh Pat, do not worry, I do know that my life is hard, but I can and do juggle it well….most times anyway *smile* thank you much lady for your care and kind reply ev…lol@decided I was cured….thank you for the smile |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Elan, thank you much Duncan…yes do, would like to see it…if you get it up and I miss it will you please email? ps…yep…I know…sigh suthern *smile* well…I wish your wishes come true…seeing as how they include me *preening*……love you lady Nancy…thank you so much… to all…I really did not like this, even told suthern it was not finished, so your comments really do cheer me up….thank you all |
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