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Bluffing.........Duet with Cpat Hair
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Bluffing.........Duet with Cpat Hair |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages 
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Geesh, why do I think back to then? You didin't know me well, It was late , and I wondered what you thought Of me. I ran away like Cinderella in need of losing both time, and my shoe, not stopping to pick it up. I couldn't stop, to busy with the pleasures of giggling, but ashamed of thoughts that appeared leaving me with damp dreams illicit Your cards Unshown still face down yet eyes brimming sex appeal, an unspoken invitation I believed The growing tensions Between you and me left me a fool, thinking you wanted me while I was longing To discover everything under shared blanket of love. Your words dealt another hand and I lost my ante as I put on poker faced laugh saying the stakes were too high. [This message has been edited by Charisma (01-13-2003 03:30 PM).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Thank you Ron, for the opportunity to write this one with you. it was a real pleasure to do, and I had a lot of fun. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I think the credit goes to you...all I really did ws edit what you wrote and add a word or two here and there..this one is truly your creation! I enjoyed! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a joy to read two of my favorite poets! This was a sure bet--enjoyed the twists of metaphor here.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh my gosh, you two wrote such a wonderful duet here, sweet friend, what a royal flush of poetic charisma here, yay, I love it, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Charisma and Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes, you both used metaphors very well to create neat little twists of the meaning within. Nice job... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You two duet very well!! So much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs & Smiles to you both, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Charisma and Capt. Ron, I love this duet you two wrote. It's beautiful.... "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
whoohoo! I love duets! Nice job, you two! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
nice job you two...helen |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
great piece guys! Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Can only say what everyone else did. Plus, great little slice of life, but we sure do have to know, first, if there is a Joker in the deck of life. You two play partners well in the poetry writing game. Enjoyed, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Ron:  you gave me to much honour Ron, it is your hand that twists the finish touch.  Serenity: glad you enjoyed the twists too Noah: always enjoying your enthousiasme and kind words. thank you for being such a good friend. Magnus: thank you Enchantress: glad to know that you enjoyed vandana: thank you garysgirl: glad you like this duet passing shadows: thank you for your kind reply 1slick_lady: thank you enchantingvamp: thank you for the great regards2you: thank you, and there might be a joker, somewhere in the deck of life |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks to all... Charisma does indeed deserve the credit here as the words and metaphors are hers... In this case I was editor not creator. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Charisma Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fantastic...James |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Charisma - nice to see a duet, especially one by you, and Cpat... BC |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Enjoyed much - good work, you two! Cor |
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