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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Searching I wear the tattered garment Of a lifetime warp and weave. And cannot change the pageant Or to find a decent leave The ramparts are as cold as stone And I fear and hate the dwell They grate me to the very bone. And bate me like I am in hell. I cannot fly this torment And it leaves me weak and sad Nor can I climb the descent For it goes from feast to bad I wile away the hours Just looking around the bend And smelling phantom flowers Until it comes unto my end Perhaps a broth of better grit Perhaps a cloth of better fit |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Simple wonderful, A finely wove poem that says much; Keep searching, It matter not what we find, But how we search. Gloom |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Your couplet fits just fine....as usual..  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sy, Gee, the way you combine poetic talent with wisdom is pure pleasure. Always many lessons, you provide. Thank you, so much. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor What you say is true, thank you for the read and reply. Nan Big  Pat, Always a delight to read your comments. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Well done, Sy... believe in what your heart feels... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
scorpio Thank you my friend. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Believe me, I am also still searching and feel we never find everything we want but the most meaningful things are abundant! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thnak you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you for the read and comment. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very enjoyable read this morning Sy! ~Morning hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress Top of the morning to you love. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A bit of nature always clears my head. Enjoyed. [This message has been edited by RSWells (01-13-2003 10:40 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
enjoyed this Sy...as usual...nicely done. |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
Enjoyed this piece very much, food for thought. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Seymour, as always, your poem is excellent. Thank you, Sir......... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
And I shall shawl against the cool as in the pall I dip mind's pool for in the all I believe in kind in shadows tall, in soothing rhyme [This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-13-2003 11:51 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells True and thank you. Cpat Hair Thank you for the read and comment. enchantingvamp Glad you stopped by. garysgirl Thank you dear friend. Elan Thank you enjoyed your answer. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your words |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I particularly liked they way you wrapped up the ending. A fine read, thanks for sharing. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vandana Thank you for the read and reply Andrew, Thank you for the comment. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wear the tattered garment Of a lifetime warp and weave. And cannot change the pageant Or to find a decent leave The ramparts are as cold as stone And I fear and hate the dwell They grate me to the very bone. And bate me like I am in hell. I cannot fly this torment And it leaves me weak and sad Nor can I climb the descent For it goes from feast to bad ============================== Perhaps a broth of better grit Perhaps a cloth of better fit ============================== my goodness Stinky.... does my "emperor need new clothes?"  *L*could the metaphors and personifications in this be any cooler? that first verse alone is worth its weight in poetic gold!! ~~~ I'll make you a coat of many colors ... one that will keep you safe and warm. One that fits you like a glove ... yet lets you fly like a dove. I'll stitch the coat with golden thread ... to cloak you from these things you dread. Made from the finest cloth, fit for a King... this moth will wrap you in butterfly wings. For this task, I wish to ask but one thing in return ... write your rhymes till the end of time, Ive still so much to learn.  It's over long before her fall from grace, she's never been this far from safe. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, That's my Tinkerbell. You are the light around the bend The pitchblende of my fantasy's end. WWRS |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
seymour, you truly are a word weaver, so eloquent in all that you write |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, see? You got the Moth to rhyme! That's our Sy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
inkedgoddess Thank you for the eloquent. Sunshine, Yes I did didn't I. |
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