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just numb...
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just numb... |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
unedited...unengaged...unloved i took the ring off my finger one time it just didnt feel right but i was just numb when i took it off tonight i just dont understand how you could 'change your mind' i cant even think i cant even cry i wish i could drink i wish i could die but i cant do a thing i cant sleep how could you do this to me? i loved you more than any one person could love another but you killed me you kill any love i could ever have for any person ever again you killed my heart and my soul but its ok now i'm just numb Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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neveah5 Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 197Ohio |
Jeez..girl it hurt me to read this |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Oh no! Not you, not numb, not even comfortably numb in this jagged edged piece. *HuGS Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
yeah, it did just hurt to read this, I have a small idea though, how about splitting that almost last line up....perhaps make it three lines....just an idea, but hey, I loved it, I love all poems that speak truth, even the sour make your face pucker so hard you think it's gonna fall off truth. Write on! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I know how this feels...I think when pain and pleasure cancel each other out or when the pain just gets too bad, we get numb. I claim self-defense...works for me. |
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