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dhicks03
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0 posted 2003-01-11 09:09 PM


Sitting on a rock, in the middle of the desert
Softly singing, sand everywhere surrounds
Yet cannot find the perfect grain
that dilutes insane
down to maniac crazy
Yes, I know you don't understand
And No, this mad man without a plan
can cry no more...poor you


Crimson inferno
of candles glow
Makes one believe
it's easy to deceive
after all, you taught your lesson well
fast learner soaks the pain
like a sponge soaks up the rain
Amazed Sunshine...you invented hell


Wish you no harm
as I'm sure your charm
will take you far
be a star
baby
and just maybe
one day
another will show you
as you've shown me
and then you'll see
Hate...made you so damn proud
for cryin out loud
Love...ours, mine, yours,.......never had a chance

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angelfriend
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1 posted 2003-01-11 09:40 PM


Sounds very lonely in that desert. Very strong message.
Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-01-11 09:44 PM



For several reasons
this hurts...
but then,
I read between lines
to something you
probably didn't even know
you wrote.

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2003-01-15 04:38 AM


Interesting...James
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4 posted 2003-01-15 10:08 AM


We become the sum total of our experiences.. good.. bad.. in love.. past love... all of it - With all of that comes wisdom - the total sum...
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5 posted 2003-01-15 10:16 AM


dhicks03
Well done enjoyed the write.

regards2you
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6 posted 2003-01-15 10:33 AM




Dennis,

The depth of your writing always touches deeply, so wise. Many thoughts and feelings are provoked from this.
I'll simply say, my final take with people such as described, whether a romantic love relationship or other, the final stance for me, when I know there is  "No Chance"  is, yep, stand back, and let go, and let God! I've lived long enough to see amazing results when the battle is His.

Thanks, Pat

  

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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7 posted 2003-01-15 10:43 AM


Yes, Dennis...
If both parties don't want to make a relationship work, it won't work......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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8 posted 2003-01-15 12:36 PM


good stuff, and you know that I can relate well
dhicks03
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9 posted 2003-01-19 12:54 PM


Thanks to all for your comments. Sunshine, got my curiousity arroused, what was it?
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