She went out picking flowers on the boondocks Innocence was her middle name, that was all she got Yet who knew that her name alone can bring destruction Who anticipated the patriarchical revulsion?
She wore a charm-bracelet her mother handed down to her Helped harvest the corn, bathed in the spring waters Who knew behind the hollyhocks A usurper was grinning with a menacing scoff
And before you know it you're taken away Your summers tattered, abducted and raped
If you only knew just how good it could have been I've never seen this side of you before What's ineluctable cannot be compromised
Demeter comes crying, holding her bracelet Swears she'd do anything to rescue her from the chthonic A mother knows best, while Zeus knows squat To let the ying and the yang co-exist in the same pot
Pomegranate is stained on her lips, she can't go back Battalions of purple heartbeats begin to attack While the last decent poet stares behind her veil Where kundalini has a last resort to prevail
And now they accuse the elders as crones The avatar is silenced from the throne
If you only knew just how good it could have been I've never seen this side of you before What's ineluctable cannot be compromised If you only knew just how good it could have been We could have lived twelve months But you and I will only live eight No, no, you and I will only live eight...
Why must we compromise? When did all our third eyes go blind? Why think of inunction? When elusively we are all trivialized Unbridled, carefree souls Forced to have to think of Hades With all their mothers crying tonight... Where Rhea is aging with a menopaused insight...
You and I will only live eight months No, no, you and I will only live eight months...
If you only knew just how good it could have been I've never seen this side of you before What's ineluctable cannot be compromised If you only knew just how good it could have been We could have lived twelve months But you will only live eight... No, no, you will only live eight... . . . . . . . . . . . .
I would go back home where I belong But I'm way out in the background I would go back home where I belong But I'm way out in the background...
Please forgive me, mother...
"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."
Shakira
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learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113 Canada eh.
2posted2003-01-1108:13 PM
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Amazing my sidekick...simply amazing!!!!
~Time has cast a spell on you, So you won't ever forget me~
garysgirl
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237 Florida, USA
3posted2003-01-1108:22 PM
Yes, my friend, this is absolutely amazing....You got me speechless, Noah.......
"Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
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Nightshade
Member Patricius
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962 just out of reach
4posted2003-01-1108:27 PM
Woweeee!! Noah, you blow me away with this one! Hugs, Chris
"Hope" is the thing with feathers- that perches in the soul....
-Emily Dickinson
ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038 USA
5posted2003-01-1108:47 PM
packed in exploding mythological proportions, Noah, and the borders and poems-within-poems merely underscored a brilliantly constructed work. Although, ribbing ya a bit, i have to wonder if you failed to close off your html on the border? LOL Do you know NakedThoughts busted me on this, good naturally no less than 20 times over the past two years for failing to do that! You take good care, ok, and keep rooting for my boy: Donovan McNabb in my fantasy pool! Jeff/Dulcy/and Batman
Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062 Pennsylvania
6posted2003-01-1109:24 PM
Yeah, ditto Wow!
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619 highways, & byways, for now
7posted2003-01-1109:31 PM
Noah - you amaze me with these writings. Stunning this one is, you get better and better...
BC
angelfriend Member
since 2003-01-11
Posts 52 Michigan USA
8posted2003-01-1109:45 PM
I am also impressed with your talents. I like the border technique as well, like a fade out to the end. Great job.
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577 displaced
9posted2003-01-1111:56 PM
good job Noah! You are indeed very creative!
vandana
Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463 USA
10posted2003-01-1204:01 PM
liked it enjoy your words
scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178 right...there
11posted2003-01-1205:11 PM
I'm speechless...
believe in what your heart feels...
NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470 A Mountain Paradise
12posted2003-01-1206:51 PM
Noah, this is astonishing! How do you manage to write these brilliant pieces?
Luvs, Marti
Magnus
Member Laureate
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135 South Carolina, USA
13posted2003-01-1207:01 PM
Noah, If you love the bird, let it fly. If the bird loves you, it will return. Hang in there buddy... This is a beautiful poem as only you can write... You are very young yet...and many more moments and times of happiness and sadness are out there... You will weather your storm....I know, because I weathered all of mine...and I love with all of my energy....just as you do too.
It will pass...
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167 state of confusion
14posted2003-01-1210:29 PM
Noah - you put a whopping amount of work into this! Tenderly written, too -
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