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Afraid Not (no strings)
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Afraid Not (no strings) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"There are no strings allowed in here." said the ball of twine at door. "It's obvious to me, my dear, you've come undone before." Thus entrance was denied to me for the sin of being string. But I was cold and wanted in. So I dared to knock again. "I told you once, and I repeat-- we have rules regarding strings. Not only are you, string," sniffed he, "I see that you're unraveling..." The door was locked again in haste. I wept to feel the twine's distaste. So I sat there on the stoop, and cursed myself for letting loose. Yes I wanted to explain and plead mercy for my plight. It's true that I am not the same-- but how else do you fly the kite? How else to explore the sky and dance the clouds with wind? So I had grabbed onto a kite, unrolling self to find my end. It is true the kite did crash, and now I am not wrapped too tight. Some might say that I was rash, but I knew the joy of flight. So I thought I'd try again as an idea came with grin: I tied my head up in a loop and gave myself a new hair-do. I fluffed the ragged ends of me, and gave myself the look of shock. Then I just smiled wickedly and dared again to knock. "Go away, you stubborn string, Did you think that I'd forgot?" So I gambled everything-- I dared to cast the lot. "I am not a string," said I. "This nonsense you shall stop." "What are you, then?" queried the twine. "Not string." I smiled. "I'm a frayed knot."   |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ROTF...you tweaked a joke, and with some talent! HUGS! |
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Poetic Bard Member
since 2003-01-22
Posts 84Canada, BC |
Cool, I really like it, again, it held my attention all the way through. Beneath, there is more beneath, but, what is there in the end? More beneath? Or something more? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Serenity! Thanks for the chuckles! ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity--Much enjoyed this turn of mouth!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I got so much more out of this than a giggle...thanks Karen, you're the best |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"There are no strings allowed in here." said the ball of twine at door. "It's obvious to me, my dear, you've come undone before." Thus entrance was denied to me for the sin of being string. But I was cold and wanted in. So I dared to knock again. "I told you once, and I repeat-- we have rules regarding strings. Not only are you, string," sniffed he, "I see that you're unraveling..." =================================== How else to explore the sky and dance the clouds with wind? So I had grabbed onto a kite, unrolling self to find my end. It is true the kite did crash, and now I am not wrapped too tight. Some might say that I was rash, but I knew the joy of flight. ================================= There is NOTHING that you cant put into rhyme and it not rock the house... *smiling at you* "clever clever" said the moth  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ROFL!! Love the humor....now stop that twining!!  |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
That's awesome.  "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 I know, I know, it's a groaner... but my daughter liked it--so it's a gem to me! smiling now. Thanks all for reading an old tired joke with a twist.  |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
I think it takes loads of talent to rhyme and reward by presenting freshly the thought, a knot indeed, you did both with the greatest of ease, very good~! *S* Atov~ |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Karen, this has got to be one of the best of yours I've have the pleasure of reading. Not only is it cute and clever, but I sense a much deeper meaning to it. Just wonderful, my friend. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
This poem leaves no loose ends..well done.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
So creative. I love this. And, yes...I think Michael's reply covers it well. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Excellent write and read. Why not cut the string and enter as the core of more. LOL  |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
LOL nice write , enjoyed it Hugs, Kelly The greatest thing u'll ever learn |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I enjoyed reading this very much. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(giggles in delight) Oh Karen, this made me laugh too, how we all are tied to the ground and knotted to this gravity wondering how the kites ever get so far up there! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - only as you could write... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Don'twine at me young lady. Afraid not will knot get you in. Enjoyed this so much, I laughed so much I nearly came unravelled. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Truly amazing what you do with a simple ball of string Serenity. Such talent! |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*grin* Must say, that's not where I thought it was going. Of course, I suppose that's why I liked it. I ramble too much. I liked it, very much. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
So I had grabbed onto a kite, unrolling self to find my end. It is true the kite did crash, and now I am not wrapped too tight. Some might say that I was rash, but I knew the joy of flight. I wish I could show you the cartoon this played in my head. You're probably one of few who would appreciate it! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ahhh serenity dear poetess....you were just "stringin' us along." lol. This is a really neat piece of writing. Enjoyed. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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