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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2003-01-10 10:21 AM


The smile that you give
is like warm fire burning
smoldering, slowly...

Lasting are embers
stirring within our desire
passionate flames...


(c) dmsmith 01-10-03


I know that you can 'read' me
but can you  'hear'  "me"?

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (01-10-2003 10:23 AM).]

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garysgirl
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1 posted 2003-01-10 10:22 AM


Donna, these are very, very beautiful.....
Thank you...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2003-01-10 10:46 AM


yes slow burn...

enjoyed...

Nan
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3 posted 2003-01-10 11:02 AM


Keep those fires burning...

VAS
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4 posted 2003-01-10 11:57 AM


Very, very nice. Wonderfully vivid, I especially like the 1st one!

Did you see my attempts yesterday? They're titled "Silly, Unrelated Senyru." They went toward the bottom fairly quickly. Maybe that's a sign.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Enchantress
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5 posted 2003-01-10 01:38 PM


Very very sensual...lovely Donna!
~Smiles & Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

zenny
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6 posted 2003-01-10 01:43 PM


very nice
Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind
7 posted 2003-01-10 02:01 PM




this is so lovely....so soft, and I love the title!!...hugssss you....


L~

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

Nightshade
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just out of reach
8 posted 2003-01-10 02:31 PM


Beautiful Donna. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2003-01-10 04:58 PM


sensual ru
lingering lashes
of lady

enjoyed it hon!!
D

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By the sea
10 posted 2003-01-10 05:52 PM


Both romantic and sensual, I love it! hugsss

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2003-01-10 05:55 PM


Gentle Spirit
A lovely write.

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
12 posted 2003-01-10 07:26 PM


Perfect, Donna. This style suits you.
Sandra

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13 posted 2003-01-10 07:52 PM


Beautiful!!

Charisma

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14 posted 2003-01-10 07:59 PM


nice
Mistletoe Angel
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15 posted 2003-01-11 05:09 AM




(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Donna, this is so very gorgeous, sweet friend, I wish for the embers to never fade and for the fireflies to always light in your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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displaced
16 posted 2003-01-11 01:19 PM


what a picture here!
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