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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-01-09 11:49 PM



Musical notes play in the background
like a favorite song turned down low
humming the words I've never written.

Sweeping your hands across the keys
keeping tempo to the beat
caught up in the melody.

Your breath breathes a fluted pitch
just out of range, so close to my lips
recorded in my dreams

~dreaming you~




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Mysteria
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1 posted 2003-01-09 11:53 PM


Oh so nice to read your words which of course are simply "dreamy" and so beautifully constructed in this poem.

~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~
        

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2003-01-10 02:26 AM


Mysteria, I am so pleased to see you here.
Thank you ever so much for reading.

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3 posted 2003-01-10 02:35 AM


wonderful!
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4 posted 2003-01-10 03:19 AM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Lori, this is so beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry as I miss love and how it sung to me like a music box! (sigh) I wish for this love to awlays shine, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sandpiper
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5 posted 2003-01-10 06:05 AM


schweeeeeeeeeeet dreams!!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2003-01-10 06:54 AM


sweetest are the dreams of the one yuove never met
Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2003-01-10 08:35 AM


a lady with love socks
on her bare feet
wearing the warm
with free toes..

it don't get any better
enjoyed this bluezy..
waycool D

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2003-01-10 08:39 AM


BluesSerenade
A lovely write, enjoyed.

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9 posted 2003-01-10 08:43 AM


Lori, this is beautiful. I enjoyed reading....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Salty
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10 posted 2003-01-10 09:10 AM


sweet dreams are made of these....who in the world would disagree... I'm singing it to you incase you didn't recognize the tune     


A most lovely soft write!!


~Salty

wranx
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11 posted 2003-01-10 01:55 PM


Bluesy,
Must have got here late, I can only echo all of the above.

Sheesh,

Ed.

Brrr!

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12 posted 2003-01-10 01:58 PM


HUgssss you...I too, am stopping in late....always enjoy the words you pen.....


L~

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

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13 posted 2003-01-10 01:59 PM


girl you can dream one heck of a poem...
or is that you write one heck of a dream?

Enjoyed.... but you knew that didn't you?

scorpio
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14 posted 2003-01-10 04:45 PM


A wonderfully lyrical poem... much enjoyed..

believe in what your heart feels...

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