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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-01-09 03:56 PM

Summer laid a breath of heavy air
Soaked in Gulf Stream storms
That did not make it far enough north
To quench the parch of us,
But did laden us with sweating breezes
That offered no relief .

We sought refuge in cool pools
That hidden in the shade
Of oak lined banks offered privacy
Enough to lay naked
On soft grass while we glistened wet
With drops of river that still clung

I asked you then
Did you love me?

You tangled your fingers
In green blades, as if gravity
Was failing and you needed the hold
To keep you anchored,

refusing to let your eyes
Meet mine.

I just smiled
And forced a laugh
Mumbling,
It must be the heat
that left you with
no sound

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (01-09-2003 04:03 PM).]

Salty
Senior Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 669
Texas

1 posted 2003-01-09 04:01 PM

Whew....It must be

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-01-09 04:03 PM

perhaps the edit clarifies the intent....
thanks for dropping in Salty... appreciate the words

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

3 posted 2003-01-09 04:33 PM

This is some VERY good writing! Well done, sir!

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2003-01-09 04:34 PM

enjoyed

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2003-01-09 04:35 PM

Thank you Auguste...glad you liked...I'm not sure about the good writing part..but if ti pleases someone..then I feel I have succeeded.
thanks again!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-01-09 04:36 PM

vandana..thank you.. appreciate your taking time to read

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

7 posted 2003-01-09 05:05 PM

why did you care, you were what, like l9, and a guy.it was still the decade or so of free love.
you were getting it......so why bother with asking if she loved u?
i dont mean to be crass, but i thought of me at l9, in l974, and the last thing any of my dopey boyfriends would have asked me then is i loved them

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2003-01-09 05:06 PM

Inked.... at 19 I had been married 3 years...and the one I asked was my wife.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2003-01-09 05:10 PM

well then, nevermind!
how sweet then,
guess im talking from the experiences
teenage years, living out her summers on the beach

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

10 posted 2003-01-09 05:33 PM

Got two years on ya Cpat. That non- answer is unlikely to be forgotten. Enjoyed

[This message has been edited by RSWells (01-09-2003 05:33 PM).]

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

11 posted 2003-01-09 05:45 PM

Thanks for dropping in RS.. no... non answers are hard to forget sometimes.
Just been taking a few backroads into the past lately and this non answer got written.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

12 posted 2003-01-09 08:53 PM

And you do that road traveling
so very well...

gravel and all.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

13 posted 2003-01-09 10:43 PM

Damn this is so good!
Wow!...more please?
~Hugs & Smiles~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

14 posted 2003-01-09 10:56 PM

I like the scene set in this poem...the imagery is light and conserved but the emotions are rock solid...

believe in what your heart feels...

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

15 posted 2003-01-10 02:00 AM

A poet after my own heart!!!

You speak the language so well Cpat~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

16 posted 2003-01-10 02:09 AM

*smiling*

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

17 posted 2003-01-10 03:50 AM

(sigh) Oh Ron, this is lovely, sweet friend, this made me cry as I miss my love and I only wish I could feel such that afterglow!n (big hugggsssssss) This is a true summer of love, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

18 posted 2003-01-10 05:50 AM

Ron,

This is like a snipit from a movie, and I for one would like you to write the rest of it...your ability to write descriptively and lull the reader into a sense of calm and peace, and then casually throw in one short,dramatic sentence to instantly change the mood is pure talent. Enjoyed this a great deal.

Warm regards, Pat

Enjoyed...

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

19 posted 2003-01-10 06:15 AM

ahhhhh yes, silence is not always golden---enjoyed!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

20 posted 2003-01-10 11:17 AM

You tangled your fingers
In green blades, as if gravity
Was failing and you needed the hold
To keep you anchored,
============================

that verse just went thru me....
and I know I dont have to explain why...
you'll already just know....

sometimes? I have to hold on to me chair arms when reading poetry...many of them yours

Moths dont care if the flame is real
The moth and flame got a sweetheart deal
Nothing fuels like flirtation
Like need, anger & desperation

A.M.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

21 posted 2003-01-10 01:28 PM

Capt......This is just SOOO good...all of it.....Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us........

(I'm not EVEN touching the AGE thing, not
after I revealed the age-difference between me and my Love....HeeHee.....)

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

22 posted 2003-01-10 01:42 PM

Must have missed your telling about age differences... but you know ages are not as important as a lot of people make them...
thanks for the nice words..

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

23 posted 2003-01-10 01:43 PM

God that's beautiful writing, made bittersweet by the years between. I love this.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

24 posted 2003-01-10 01:57 PM

Mikey...you are going give me the big head with those compliments you know.. ( chuckling) Thanks for very kind words... they are appreciated..

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

25 posted 2003-01-10 10:25 PM

I am in awe.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

A Tone of Voice
Member

since 2001-07-18

Posts 287

26 posted 2003-01-10 10:58 PM

CPat, this was, I can't think of appropriate words to express it, WOW~! Now wasn't that original....haha, truly this is excellent, it's so real and charming.....good good good job~!

Atov

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