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quik
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since 2002-11-27
Posts 91
Dinwiddie,Virginia

0 posted 2003-01-09 12:37 PM


The Me inside wants to scream about the me on the out.
It seems that you never want to get to know what they are both about.
Simplistic verbals doesnt stimulate my soul,
What is needed is for you to take control.
Not control of the person he sees,
but hold the heart as gentle as a breeze.
The Me inside is screaming about love.
Not the existential, reverberated,
suffocating one like a glove,
But the kind that is uplifting soaring high as a dove.
The You inside is tearing my outside apart.
Physical adaptations of the heart.
The very rarest of rarest of kinds,
the insides of you does not touch my mind.
Do you understand what I am saying?
Staying away from the games you are playing.
Tossing and turning the wheels of thought
My insides and out cannot be bought.
Churn this around like a cloud.
My insides and out are screaming outloud.



© Copyright 2003 Antonio Duran Weary - All Rights Reserved
neveah5
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since 2002-11-22
Posts 197
Ohio
1 posted 2003-01-09 02:16 PM


I feel this all the way

unfortunately

Barbara Trautman
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since 2002-10-23
Posts 90

2 posted 2003-01-09 02:22 PM


I don't have any criticism.  I only can say you certainly touched my heart.  Sounds like a relationship that should be put aside and move on.  I speak from experience.  If he can't see you for who you are now, he never will.  Probably.  Barbara
gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
3 posted 2003-01-09 04:21 PM


The Me inside wants to scream about the me on the out.

antonio, i love this. you couldnt have saisd this better. i enjoyed the way you spoke of how people are often so different on the inside to how they are on the outside. and how either of these personalities can hurt you, inside and out.

thanks for the thoughts. putting this in my library.
lots of love, gem xxxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Salty
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since 2002-11-23
Posts 669
Texas
4 posted 2003-01-09 04:52 PM


our outside does have away of not showing it's true colors...at times.


Nicely said!


~Salty

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
5 posted 2003-01-10 04:24 AM


sad...very sad write
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