»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #24
»
QUIETLY
| Open Poetry #24 |
|
QUIETLY |
|
|
Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA 
|
QUIETLY Quitely, I lay listening to the sounds in the night. There is nothing that I fear, unless it is the morning light. My nights belong to me, no one to intrude on my time. And that's when I can pull out my little reminder sign. I remind myself of many things, both the good and bad. Some of them make me giggle, and others make me very sad. Now lying here alone in bed, my thoughts tumble wild and free. I remind myself that maybe, this is where I'm meant to be. Quietly, I listen. My wind chimes are touched by the wind. Their soft gentle tinkle, will lull me to sleep again. Then a thought crosses my mind, and I remind myself once more. He's just like the wind that passes through. I need to close the door. Copyright © * That which gives light, must endure burning * |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Kitty Sandridge - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
WhooHoo!!! Geez, I love this one!!!! The ending is awesome! |
||
Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I really enjoyed this Kitty**  Chris"Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
||
|
vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kitty** Well done, I like the end. |
||
|
Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
very nice penned, enjoyed it! Charisma |
||
|
neveah5 Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 197Ohio |
I also especially liked the end nice write |
||
|
A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
yes, yes, I agree, the ending made it special, very good~! *S* ~I envy those who have perfected the art of being~ |
||
|
Astro Member
since 2003-01-08
Posts 69Ca. |
I ususally don't like couplets because the rhythm can sound contrite. However, you did a great job of sounding fresh and natural while using meter. I'm kinda slow and I seem to be the only one in the forum that doesn't get it... is the "He" of the last stanza the spirit of a loved one departed, or is it God? |
||
|
Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
To all of you who took the time to read this I would like to say thanks! You all give me so much comfort and encouragement with your comments and heartfelt replys! Thank you: passing shadows, Nightshade, vandana, Seymour Tabin, Charisma, neveah5 and A Tone of Voice.... Astro: To answer your question, the "HE" that I refer to in this poem (and most of my others) is someone I love very dearly, but one whom God has not chosen for me to be with! I have accepted that, and the writes are my soul comfort at this point! Again, Thanks to all, My love, Kitty |
||
garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kitty, I also enjoyed your beautiful poem. I also relate, since my Love and I aren't physically together right now. I say it that way, because we're always together in heart...  "Love makes the world go around" |
||
|
enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
i loved the ending here, made me shiver! great piece. reminded me of a person i knew once, he moved like the wind, as unpredictable and unaccountable. |
||
|
bluRaven Junior Member
since 2003-01-08
Posts 18Richmond, VA |
I can relate to the emotion expressed in this poem. I love it, very well written and expressed. from a new member :-) "~Sometimes you have to forgive someone because you want them in your life."~~ |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Killer ending Kitty. So sorry it doesn't seem to be in the cards for you two. |
||
|
regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kitty, I enjoyed this, too. And, who knows what tomorrow may bring? Best wishes, may you find that true love.... Hugs and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
||
|
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very nicely done Kitty....and maybe one day the he will be there beside thee.... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
