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Euphoric Butterfly
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Euphoric Butterfly |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
How could it happen? The sight of you, I'm like an excited butterfly. Spirit, looping, ~losing all grace~. My heart rushing to dizzying heights, suspended, swirling. And, mind soaring, like a bird intoxicated on ripened Piracantha berries, though, boundaries set long ago... Yet still, I smash into imaginary glass walls. How could it happen? The sight of you, and I am madly in love, all over, again! . . . . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (01-06-2003 10:01 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
sounds like you have it bad.... stay away from smashing into those glass walls.... one could get a headache you know... nicely done.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
scratching my head.. how does one give a butterfly a sobriety test? "Fly a straight line?"  this matches my giddiness today. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ron and Serenity, True, I could have cleaned this up a little, and chosen a more poetically pretty theme such as using the nectar of love, etc. But, I wanted to capture the commonness of falling head over heels, without rational thought... It is risky using the title, but....very real. Birds really do fly into windows, when eating Piracantha berries.....somethg. they wouldn't do normally, for they know better.... boundaries, you know? thanks for your comments...smiling here. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think you caught the assault of one-lovemanship quite well...that head over heels wallop that comes to some, now and then... Good job, Pat. Left a smile! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL at this one. I think I've experienced that glass-smashing flight pattern before. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh I love this!! Know the feeling well...almost a clumsiness.. A head over heels feeling of giddiness. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, I love the way you captured this feeling, and the common everyday language that you captured it in. I like this kind of poetry, as you probably can tell by what I write. It seems more real to me, somehow....even the thought of a "boozed-up butterfly"..HaHa!! I love that title......  "Love makes the world go around" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
To all, Laughing here, I have edited this, however it is not showing yet, and not sure it will. The term boozed-up isn't a term I ever use but seemed right at the time until I saw it printed....my point was that I wanted to capture ~common~, but alas, I captured crass, I think.... well, so it's not my best poem.... there are worse things than boozed-up butterflies and when I think of them I will NOT be inclined to print.... thanks all for reading, Hugs, Pat... ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You know what? It STILL makes me smile! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Yep, Sunshine, I knew you would comment on this one. To do it twice without the edit showing is interesting. Sure glad this is keeping you laughing. ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
wish it was spring, butterflies and all thanks for the reminder, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big huggssssssssss) Oh Patricia, this is beautiful, sweet friend, forgive me as I a crying as when I thought of my Joanna I imagined her as a butterfly and now she has flown away from me! (wipes tears) I wish for your butterfly to always kiss your hearts tulips, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Pat, I think I like the image of the boozed up butterfly, which is better than the butterfly floosie. All up, it is a giddying poem. I wish I had read this before posting Mythunderstood, then I would have had an excuse. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
hehehe delightful, giddy, euphoric is right! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pat, Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Just to say thanks to ~All~ of you for your comments. Yes, that instant falling head over heals in love (in lust?, in infatuation?, who knows since it usually doesn't pan out) is giddy, to say the least. hugs and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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FLOWERGIRL Junior Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 40the woods of Pa |
all the changes a buterfly goes through (and so quickly) ~ kinda like some relationships ~ fast and exciting ~ and yes those glass walls of obstacles galore ~ come down to eath where your love is and be found ~ |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
a smile in words-perfect title!! enjoyed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Ya wanna crawl into this little cacoon of mine with me dear? |
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