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ethome
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2003-01-05 11:32 PM



This is an acoustic ramble and not really searching for a commercial spot. Harry Chapin or Dylan type of thing if anything.


There's something mystic in the air
some believers find no peace,
and there's confusion here and there
youth can't escape the grief.
Clergymen they pour the wine.
Big business give thier dues.
Neither one dares cross the line
their closets in dark rooms.

There's some patrons feeling slighted
while their leaders roam the globe.
There's some faithful poor and frightened
with their pockets full of holes.
But I let freedom light the dark
with a vision once disguised
and there's no balcony nor harp
ain't no stairway to climb.

I'm living in the afterglow
of the fire and heat,
while cosy christians pay a toll
to phalic window scenes.
But beyond this big comotion
I hear the tradewinds blow,
out where the Lord's not poaching
my money for my soul.

You might ride a bicycle
or drive a Cadillac.
Might sit up in the front row
or way down at the back.
Might be a big C.E.O.
or be taking out the trash.
Whatever way you come and go
someday you're going back,
back past the saints in robes
blocking heavens pass.
Now they might say they're selling hope
but the Lord's not short of cash.

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The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

© Copyright 2003 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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Victoria Australia
1 posted 2003-01-06 01:03 AM


ethome,
I think you are right, the Lord's not short of cash after all, we have been told for generations to lay up treasure in heaven but have you ever noticed that once you've laid it up there, it's difficult to find again.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-01-06 03:08 AM


definately! Love Chapin and Dylan...can hear them here!
Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2003-01-07 04:43 AM




(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Eric, this is so very true, sweet friend, that is kind of how the whole idea of Lutheranism began, when there was the impression you could buy your way into heaven and the whole Protestant tradition rose after the 90 Theses were published! (sigh) Whatever treasure there is you must be deserving of to achieve it, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
4 posted 2003-01-08 03:47 AM



Eric~
Wow...you've said a mouthful with this write.
Great job of getting your point across in
this powerful piece.
Very well done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
5 posted 2003-01-10 12:02 PM


But it is a statement that sends a powerful message.   It's a  sign of the times that don't appear to be changing much!  

Much enjoyed the read ethome.

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2003-01-10 07:22 PM


Take the rib off of the pit.
douse again the barbecue.
Slice another piece of pie
in praise of red, and white and blue.
Sing the praises and salute
cheat your taxes on the sly--
rest easy in your lazy boy
and don't forget the misty eyes
squeezed back with chug of beer...

and ooh..we really should jam sometime E...

love you my hippy man dude!

Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2003-01-10 09:39 PM


Damn! This is one tune I can sing with my insides.
GOlDsparklESS
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8 posted 2003-01-11 01:05 AM


I'm living in the afterglow
of the fire and heat,
while cosy christians pay a toll
to phalic window scenes.

this is cool.  i mean, the whole thing was PHAT.  very songy.  

Paul Wilson
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9 posted 2003-01-11 01:13 AM


Ethome...This goes down as smooth as a glass of 100 year old wine. Waiting for the music to stop, so I can quit singing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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10 posted 2003-01-11 03:33 AM


Now you have to know I just love this one, and feeling like hearing the melody that was planned for it but I am creating my own.  Looks like we whistle the same tune on this one.  Great job.

~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~
        

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
11 posted 2003-01-11 07:20 AM



But I heard Neil!

defenestrate
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12 posted 2003-01-11 07:46 AM


excellent song-i could certainly see an early dylanesque song structure to this. thinking "with god on our side" with a transition at the end.
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