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dhicks03
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0 posted 2003-01-04 07:38 PM



Memories of touch still lie upon my fingertips
Like the words remain upon quivered lips
Echo tomorrow of yesterdays wine
Step dance left and right all through the mind

Promise of forever lay gentle upon the rain
Beared cross of never, came screaming just the same
Pillowed dreams give way to meanings unclear
Leave vapor trails upon the soul, as they vanish into thin air

Colossal deju-vu’s ring as if so surreal
While others embrace the pain, learning how to feel
I waited earth long through jaded thoughts of old
Captured the permeated essence of your perfume, lived the story told

And now the shadows dance inside my head
Hovers as is if they are the stars where lovers words were said
Immeasurable are the days, and the hours just the same
For time has chosen the ways, as I have chosen the blame

Only to await this sentence of fate
The time of a kiss having passed with the hour
Seems as if remembrance in song
Will display once again, love we searched to find
Was there before us…all along

© 2002 Dennis Hicks
12/26/02 11:50 PM


© Copyright 2003 Dennis Hicks - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2003-01-04 08:49 PM


Nice Write. ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2003-01-04 08:53 PM


See my tears!how poetic!


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3 posted 2003-01-04 09:12 PM


Very nicely done Dennis....good write..
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4 posted 2003-01-04 10:18 PM




Dennis,

I so enjoy your poetry. In this poem
I like this:

..."vapor trails upon the soul"...

and this:

"For time has chosen the ways,
as I have chosen the blame."

not to mention, the rest of the poem, equally enjoyed as much.

Warm regards  Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

visitvenus
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5 posted 2003-01-04 10:25 PM


Touched my heart...beautiful write.

-Venus

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6 posted 2003-01-04 10:34 PM


I can say nothindg but WOW!

Never be normal!

Barbara Trautman
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7 posted 2003-01-04 10:58 PM


Long ago my pain was as real.  So beautifully said - wish I could have written it.  
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8 posted 2003-01-04 11:10 PM


Hi Dennis,
This is a very beautiful love poem. I love it....  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

dhicks03
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9 posted 2003-01-05 12:35 PM


Thank you all so much for your kind words, they made my day!!
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10 posted 2003-01-05 03:18 AM


Enjoyed...James
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