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lucky
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0 posted 2003-01-03 09:27 PM



her thoughts move and
the poem's twirl takes different
shape scenery coupled with motion
and nature enhancing the quality
attired in the depth of raw

emotion pressing
against her form
until the imagery
itself literally burst
through on satin vellum
in swollen flames from molten
quill the poet's desire is hot & the only
waking activity in the world can’t be consumed
in slumber but was instead kissed by crafty lips &
coy sable tongue & though shadows conceal the
poignant recognition that while change is
inevitably running its course
the outward

appearance of things may
look the same though the mist
in dawn is moist and not a true
cause for despair under the
circumstance and so
continuing
she

2002/12/22  07:22 PM


Speaking of ghosts, and after such an eternity. . .wouldn't you know, here comes mine again...
~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~

[This message has been edited by lucky (01-03-2003 09:30 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-01-03 09:48 PM


OUTSTANDING! I'm going to tuck this one away safely, to re-read again and again.
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2 posted 2003-01-03 09:49 PM


Lucky....I have always admired the way you poor a thought onto paper, as if it was some fiber of your heart made into words...sweet and slick and salty.  
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3 posted 2003-01-04 04:03 AM


damn, that's good!
regards2you
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4 posted 2003-01-04 06:08 AM




Lucky,

The best run-on sentence I ever read and one of the best poems in awhile.
I did not take one breath until finished reading. Wow! Good! Enjoyed!

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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