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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2003-01-03 06:39 PM




Dear John,

Thank you for your timely well wishes,
but your hourglass no longer suits me.
The white sandy nights you cherish most
never really suited this fragile heart.
I stepped out of the tiny crystal shell
in which you offered to house me,
to possess me, body and soul.

Different sunsets now hold my gaze,
I feel longer warmer days,
less frigid nights.
No, your chosen hourglass
had too few real grains,
and the spill
was forever upside down.

But thank you for the offer.
It was good to hear from you....
good to know you still remember
the real sandcastles and tidepools,
and not just the seaweed.

Have a good life.

© Copyright 2003 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 2003-01-03 06:46 PM


Whew!  Boy am I glad my name's not John!  
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2 posted 2003-01-03 06:46 PM


you tell em woman !!!
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3 posted 2003-01-03 06:49 PM


Duncan, LOL, his name isn't really John either.

slick one, sometimes that letter just has to be written

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4 posted 2003-01-03 06:52 PM


Wow! could not have done this better myself
and your choice of imagery is perfect for
this piece....Excellent..

The closing lines are perfect!!!  OH YEAH!!

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5 posted 2003-01-03 06:55 PM


Uhhhh, then Kacy...how's he gonna know who he is???     LMAO
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6 posted 2003-01-03 06:58 PM


Magnus, thank you for your reply, it makes me feel better about the write.

Duncan? What if I had written Dear Dunc?
LOL, he knows, he knows, and so does his nose.

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7 posted 2003-01-03 07:02 PM


If you'd written 'Dear Dunc'...then we could have avoided all this confusion!  
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8 posted 2003-01-03 07:04 PM


ROTFL at you Duncan. So where is your formal reply letter????
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9 posted 2003-01-03 10:53 PM


Dang Kacy!
I loved the way you wrote this
and incorporated the castles
falling through the sands of time.

I'm so glad I didn't miss this...
It's really a beautiful poem!!


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10 posted 2003-01-03 11:03 PM


Kacy, I like the way you wrote this. It was very much to the point.
Yes, those "Dear John" letters do have to be written sometimes, don't they?

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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11 posted 2003-01-03 11:40 PM


You are so much more gracious than I. I admire your dignity and style, lady.
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12 posted 2003-01-03 11:47 PM


you go girl!


I stepped out of the tiny crystal shell
in which you offered to house me,
to possess me, body and soul.

i love the feeling of new found power in this!

lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

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13 posted 2003-01-04 01:24 AM


Lori, I'm so glad you liked it!

Ethel, hehe, sometimes a gal's gotta do what a gal...you know this line

Karen,? you are always gracious dear serenity

Gemma, thanks for your reply
Thanks, ladies!

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14 posted 2003-01-04 03:45 AM


wow
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15 posted 2003-01-04 05:43 AM




Kacy,

Perfect!

and this: ..."to few real grains"...

oh, good, good, good, the entire poem written with such class and empowerment. Liked the imagery, too.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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16 posted 2003-01-04 06:26 AM


Tough to breathe in those things, one gets awful thirsty too. Enjoyed
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17 posted 2003-01-04 01:39 PM


Midnitesun - yes indeed, this is a dear john at it's finest...

BC

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18 posted 2003-01-04 02:30 PM


shadows, RS, Pat, Bill,
thanks for reading and replying to this.
It has taken years for me to spill this one from my quill.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (01-04-2003 02:31 PM).]

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