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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-01-03 12:14 PM

Many ghosts pressed their hands
against the pane last night.
Their prints faintly color grey
the rainglass of the walk.
From thin branches, slivers fan
and twist on dripping stems.
In this wet sullen weather,
the ghosts move leaves with breath.

Lightning scrims across the sky.
Sun is loomed through by slow clouds.
The thunder is a voice on high
spreading low and far.
And the ghosts upon the pane
cover views, tapping on windows.
Leaving fog and blankened static,
voicing grey beats to wet stone.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2003-01-03 12:22 PM

Yet they do it all so rhythmically - In sync with Mother Nature's grand scheme...
Nicely done, Mike...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-01-03 12:23 PM

Great write Mike..
Makes me want to snuggle further down under the comforter.
Wonderful imagery and I much enjoyed the read.
~Smiles, Hugs, and a Happy New Year, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

visitvenus
Member

since 2002-12-30

Posts 101
PA, USA

3 posted 2003-01-03 12:23 PM

This created great images for me. I really like it!

-Venus

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2003-01-03 12:54 PM

Many ghosts pressed their hands
against the pane last night.
Their prints faintly color grey
the rainglass of the walk.

Mikey - this is wonderful. Gloomy and yet....thrilling at the same time. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-01-03 01:38 PM

love it!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2003-01-03 01:40 PM

yeah Mikey... captured well...and conveyed even better..

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-01-03 02:33 PM

excellent conveyance of mood and images

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2003-01-03 03:37 PM

bsquirrel - great write, well thought out...

BC

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-01-03 03:45 PM

Yes, Mikey, I could almost see ghost imprints on the window pane........
Very good, poet friend....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2003-01-03 07:02 PM

Lightning scrims across the sky.
********************************
Love that line.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

11 posted 2003-01-03 07:32 PM

love your gray day,
some days, you just dont need the colors, right?

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

12 posted 2003-01-03 08:37 PM

Brilliant in the gray...striking write.
ThisDiamond

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