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Masked Intruder
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0 posted 2003-01-03 02:30 AM



The night drips dark tears from ever darker eyes,
feeding puddles on the floors with hurtful, silent cries.
Remorse grows thick inside my heart, building in aching bounds;
it burns all light from my mind, it leaves me with just one sound.
Your voice echoes in memory, whispering from end to end;
I ache in mind, in heart, in soul with the words, "Let's just be friends."

© Copyright 2003 Philip Zemler - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-01-03 02:52 AM




Ah, so sad. But, even worse if you hear those words after being intimately envolved, and so much harder to deal with. Finding the one I think is right for me to discover I'm not right for him, hurts.

You captured a real part of life.
Enjoyed.

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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2 posted 2003-01-03 02:56 AM


this is a nicely written painful write.

I hope that you can find joy in a friendship.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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3 posted 2003-01-03 05:02 AM


ooooops! I guess that's why he's mad at me, huh?
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4 posted 2003-01-03 07:54 AM


friends?

my grin.

I happen to be excellent in that capacity!

*battin' eyelashes*

thanks for the card you...now drag that jester hat on down to N'Awlins..oh I'd say about a month and a half?

kises you, cause yer my buddy and ya need 'em.


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5 posted 2003-01-03 10:33 AM


...and what ever happened to Boston???  Christmas has come & gone, masked one..

Nice poem, btw - Being friends can sometimes be better, ya know - It's forever...

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6 posted 2003-01-03 11:50 AM


Said so well...difficult to teather the heart in full flight.
Love is limitless, friendship is priceless...feelings are boundless. ThisDiamond

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7 posted 2003-01-03 11:56 AM


Those dreaded words....such a killer when it's only one sided.  Painful and powerful words you speak.


Nicely captured though


~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
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8 posted 2003-01-03 06:45 PM


Ouch. That's a sad reverberating sound you never want in your ears.
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