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rm711
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since 2002-11-30
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Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2003-01-01 05:02 PM



Trying to make sense
Of the tears you cried
Because I didn’t think
Yesterday was so bad

But then I realised
What was really broken

You’re in a relay
Between reality and your imagination
You’re throwing yourself away
Cut back
Save yourself
I’m doing all I can

I don’t think I can take this weight
You’re laying your life in my hands
Trusting me with your all
And I can’t take the pressure

Everyone’s eyes are on me
They are expecting too much of me
Expecting some kind of miracle
I never said I was magic

I just wanted to help

But then I realised
What was really broken

You’re in a relay
Between reality and your imagination
You’re throwing yourself away
Cut back
Save yourself
I’m doing all I can

Please help me here
I’m scared
Because I want it so bad
I want you to be happy

I’m doing all I can
And you just won’t help yourself
You can’t see
You’re hurting me
And yourself
And everyone that cares

But then I have to realise
What is really broken

You’re not willing to sacrifice anything
To make this work
I may as well give up

But you know I won’t
I won’t ever, I don’t ever
You’re gonna win something you didn’t even know you were fighting.


"Some men see things as they are and say why? I dream things that never were and say why not?"
Rosie Mitchell

[This message has been edited by rm711 (01-01-2003 07:43 PM).]

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Nan
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1 posted 2003-01-01 10:43 PM


You can only do your best, rm... It's got to be enough..
visitvenus
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since 2002-12-30
Posts 101
PA, USA
2 posted 2003-01-01 11:25 PM


I really liked this - it reminded me of someone I was trying to "save" but he wouldn't try to save himself.  Eventually I had to stop or lose myself with him.

Beautifully written...

-Venus


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