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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-12-31 11:46 AM


{I'll drown in my own book of shakespeare}

        seeking your face;

engraved impression/s
vibrating the breath
of brass reed--

Would it be the same
as falling in love-
     hearts imperative,
echoing here
while I was elsewhere

         You, laughter among
zodiacs,--warrior angel
stirring  dark ocean floors
    blackened veils
between worlds

Harps of shadow     ever at play;
      that moment just before
the river bends  -- to sweet
arm/s of sleep--peace under  shaded
    palm

The wind will whisper
    midwinter
another instance of embrace
scattering the haunt --

Upon the ground I knelt
remembering    the dance      ''endless'' ('2)
the blue calm,     crowded
with flowers, yellow, red, pink---
---white petals---

fog will drape   the earth
glow of stars      will weep

another year passes

dusk by journal and pen



I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (12-31-2002 11:47 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-12-31 11:52 AM


L~  
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2 posted 2002-12-31 11:58 AM


The wind will whisper
    midwinter
another instance of embrace
scattering the haunt --
---------

another year passes

dusk by journal and pen
-----------


Lovely lines here... enjoyed the read a great deal.

Happy New Year to You.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-12-31 11:58 AM



Lauren's back!
Happy Dance!

and oh!
I love this poem!

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4 posted 2002-12-31 01:25 PM


Would it be the same
as falling in love-
     hearts imperative,
echoing here
while I was elsewhere

         You, laughter among
zodiacs,--warrior angel
stirring  dark ocean floors
    blackened veils
between worlds

Harps of shadow     ever at play;
      that moment just before
the river bends  -- to sweet
arm/s of sleep--peace under  shaded
    palm

The wind will whisper
    midwinter
another instance of embrace
scattering the haunt --

=================================

I saw your name, smiled, drew in a deep breath..then I read your words and exhaled...
did you just know how much I needed to read your winged words today....
thank you my butterfly twin,
love you, miss you...



Will the wind remember the names it has blown in the past?
With this crutch, its old age and wisdom, it whispers no ... this will be the last.

jh

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5 posted 2002-12-31 01:34 PM


Wonderful words
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6 posted 2002-12-31 01:41 PM


Ah Lauren how I have missed reading you!
And oh what a treasure this is!!
Love it...love it....love it!!
Happy New Year sweet poetess.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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7 posted 2002-12-31 01:56 PM


Lauren,  welcome back and what an awesome
entrance,  beautifully done...very much so..

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8 posted 2002-12-31 02:02 PM


Lauren, good to see you again. You made a beautiful one here.
Sandra

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9 posted 2002-12-31 08:52 PM


Harps of shadow     ever at play;
      that moment just before
the river bends  -- to sweet
arm/s of sleep--peace under  shaded
    palm

Oh yes!  Your words weep like a willow in the wind...
or maybe it's me and my sentimental memories that you depict!

Thank you for never missing a beat~

Much love to you Lady Lauren~

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-31-2002 08:52 PM).]

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10 posted 2003-01-01 09:36 AM


I would have to quote the entire poem to highlight my favorite parts--applause to the beauty of your words!!  Happy New Year!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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11 posted 2003-01-01 09:56 AM


Lauren....  


Beautiful, just absolutely.......  


(BTW....I just noticed the quote in you Critique Box..........
"Be kind. For everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle." Plato)

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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12 posted 2003-01-01 10:08 AM


Lauren,
Nice to see you back, lovely write, enjoyed.

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13 posted 2003-01-01 10:26 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Lauren, this is sooooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love Shakespeare as I love so much poetry and music and having the impression that truly...all's well that ends well! (kiss on cheek) Happy New Year, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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14 posted 2003-01-02 01:37 AM



unprecendented. wow.

ghost_got_married
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15 posted 2003-01-02 05:50 AM


Interesting phrasing in this one, I like it very much

Don't wish upon a star, reach for one!

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16 posted 2003-01-02 09:14 AM


"Another year passes."

And love, remains.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

ethome
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17 posted 2003-01-02 09:20 AM


Wonderful full bodied and rich metaphors as usual Lauren.......
Then some logic too...yes..."Would it be the same
as falling in love-
     hearts imperative,
echoing here
while I was elsewhere"

Very well done!


winston
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18 posted 2003-01-02 05:27 PM


Not Shakespeare as I know it! But a good read. Thanks.
Martie
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19 posted 2003-01-02 07:34 PM


Lauren

You always write with such grace, like a ballerina's hand, just beautiful.

ecrivan
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20 posted 2003-01-02 11:32 PM


Happy New Year. welcome back to you and your pen...pleasure to read


Salty
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21 posted 2003-01-03 02:17 AM


such a beautiful writing of ink spilled words.  I came looking for you today because I hadn't seen you around...I guess you had been gone. I was too for a few days so I wasn't sure if it was me or you missing

Nice reading U


~Salty  

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

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