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Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

0 posted 2002-12-31 12:21 PM

the sky tonight
is an ugly sky,
churning dark and dank
charcoal bruises
against deep purple--
no glimmer revealed to
mascara's futile searching
upward..ever upward;

thunder hurls, not a roar,
but mocking fragments
of a shrill voice--
and through the rain,
I hear nails
on a chalkboard

tonight,
I cannot feel
the storm, the intensity,
I cannot breathe its life;
tonight,
I am an observer
sitting cross-legged
in a weather pattern--
wondering
if I could be
the lightening,
or wind,
or rain--
or,

if I am simply
a charcoal bruise
against an endless
deep purple sky

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

CSKpoet
Senior Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

1 posted 2002-12-31 12:29 PM

you are a survivor and will overcome the storms
nice write of emotions that are well expressed
hugs, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2002-12-31 01:07 AM

I could not have written it better.

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

3 posted 2002-12-31 03:00 AM

Tis awful to be off balance. Disconcerting to be without assurance. Desolation holds all the letters necessary to spell alone. We've all been there. Hope for the best, you never know.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-12-31 10:03 AM

vivied images and a dark current through it all... I think you a survivor as well. Remember even bruises heal in time...

May your new Year be Filled with the Things you desire and peace be always in you...

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2002-12-31 01:53 PM

if I could be
the lightening,
or wind,
or rain--
or,

if I am simply
a charcoal bruise
against an endless
deep purple sky
===========================

very cool imagery, analogy and personification...
"charcoal bruise" ... such an original image.
emotive, expressive piece..well done!!
peace and poetry,
jm

Will the wind remember the names it has blown in the past?
With this crutch, its old age and wisdom, it whispers no ... this will be the last.

jh

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2002-12-31 05:44 PM

I know these dark storms.....

Happy New Year to you.....

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2002-12-31 06:51 PM

This reminds me of the uneasy feeling I get when I can see it coming, and it scares me!

You write a good storm Sandpiper~

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