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visitvenus
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0 posted 2002-12-30 12:24 PM


My heart remains broken
I can't seem to move on
If I could just hate you
It would be much easier

The reality is you don't love me
The way I love you

It doesn't make you a bad person
You did nothing wrong

If you had cheated
Or lied
Or treated me badly
Moving on could come quicker

If I could just hate you
This love could fade

Why do you have to be so good
So kind
So tender
Even now at the end

Why can't I hate you
For breaking my heart
On that fact alone
I should be able to place blame

If you weren't so perfect
If every moment together not been so magical
I could move on
I could put the pieces back together

I wish I could hate you


© Copyright 2002 Laura Vito - All Rights Reserved
neveah5
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1 posted 2002-12-30 12:47 PM


Welcome  

i think all of us feel this way at some point in our lives

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-12-30 12:50 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Sometimes we just can't let go because we feel so insecure leaving someone behind to cope on their own and wanting another to feel fortified too! (sigh) This is a heartwrenching debut, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you, you have come to the right place, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Krawdad
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3 posted 2002-12-30 01:16 AM


So many possibilities, so hard to find the right one . . .
Welcome to PIP !

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4 posted 2002-12-30 01:23 AM


    
A lot of emotion in your first posting.  I read your reply after I posted your welcome and I felt the same way a year ago, and I am full of confidence now in what I try to do, and hope you will be too.  You did not put your email on your profile so I could not send you the usual surprise we send, but am glad you found us in any case and know you will enjoy it here.  


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visitvenus
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5 posted 2002-12-30 01:24 AM


Thank you so much for the warm welcome.  I was a little nervous posting since I've never considered myself to be a poet, writer, or even have a speck of the arts running in my blood -- until I found this site and was reminded of all the 'documents' I have stored on my computer that I've written to myself over the years.

Everyone here is so talented.  I hope I can contribute a small fraction of the wonderful things I'm reading here!

Glad I found you all!

-Venus

passing shadows
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6 posted 2002-12-30 01:43 AM


Hiya! Welcome to Passions.

I know what you mean about how you feel here in the write. I've been through it. Hope it gets easier.

Midnitesun
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7 posted 2002-12-30 01:48 AM


welcome! Yes, it sure would be easier sometimes.
garysgirl
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8 posted 2002-12-30 02:59 AM


VENUS...


           

WELCOME  TO  PASSIONS  IN  POETRY

Hey, I found you.....  
I really enjoyed your poem,
though I could feel a lot of sadness in it. That means your heart was in it.
If you just keep writing from your heart, all your poetry will be good.
It will help you a lot, too. I will be looking for more of
your poems.....  

Ethel.....garysgirl

Sunshine
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9 posted 2002-12-30 05:41 AM



Welcome to Passions!  "All those documents" that you have stored in your computer probably tells us that you are a poet/writer at heart...and I look forward to your sharing them with us.  Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

Duncan
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10 posted 2002-12-30 11:35 AM


Quite the 'document' here.  I related...just a bit.  
regards2you
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11 posted 2002-12-30 12:03 PM



~Welcome to Passions~

I think this is a great first poem.
The subject matter has not been covered.  You worte this well, and it is so difficult to have found the one we want so much, and there is no fault anywhere, just not meant to be....

I have news, though, this kind of acceptance is much easier (hard, yes) but easier for when we are thrashed by someone we love, it hurts so much more, for not only must the relationship end, we left feeling less than, too often. Much deeper anguish.

Enjoyed and glad you found us, for I am sure glad you posted this new angle on lost love.

Hugs and warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

SPIRIT
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12 posted 2002-12-30 12:27 PM


Very nice. Be grateful that you don't 'hate' it is such a life wasting emotion and doesn't affect the hated one only the hating one.
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