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Daniel J D
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0 posted 2002-12-29 10:31 PM



The night, my darkest friend
Inside your silent moments, I see your stars
When the morning returns you leave for another
I spend each day recollecting my memories
Avoiding the thought of the pain you bring to me

Shall I find a place where day is forever
I would be as pleased as many other
Shall I stop finding dreams, for they are never real
I call for a moment when screams will desert my call

Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love
(Daniel J D)

© Copyright 2002 Daniel J D Ringuet - All Rights Reserved
regards2you
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1 posted 2002-12-30 09:01 AM




Read this through a few times; Deep, and I like it.... I wish the word call wasn't used twice in last line....
it makes me re-think the meaning....
I liked the night going to another...

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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2 posted 2002-12-30 09:05 AM


Daniel, this is a strong poem. I feel lots of emotion in it. It's written very well. Thanks for sharing.  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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