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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2002-12-28 02:55 PM


"Wanna play in the tidepools?"

That was your opening line.
I laughed, and then you cast yourself
upon my heart with line two.

"Do you like quiche and java in bed?"

I nearly wept in hysterics at that one,
the vision went straight to my head.
Then line three had a sinker attached.

"I play flute music under the stars at midnight."

I thought I could make it to line four,
but was reeled in by that one line.


© Copyright 2002 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-12-28 03:20 PM


WEll I think I would enjoy a fisherman such as this.....sure enjoyed reading about one.
~Salty

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2 posted 2002-12-28 03:55 PM


Thanks for the reply Salty.

Yep, some lines are really catchy.

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3 posted 2002-12-28 04:22 PM


good write...strange lines...never had anyone say such things to me...kinda neat
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4 posted 2002-12-28 10:10 PM


Well,  Lady.
Here's another one of yours that I almost missed. This one was posted while I was out today, too. I sure am glad that I looked near the bottom of the page and saw this.
I think your fisherman had some pretty good lines in this one.... HeeHee!!
I enjoyed reading it, Kacy....  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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5 posted 2002-12-28 11:08 PM


i dont think these lines would quite do it for me, but whatever floats your boat, right,
nice sentiments, different kind of poem,

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6 posted 2002-12-29 03:47 PM


Thnaks friends, for reading and replying.
There were actually a few more lines he threw out, these are ones I remembered; I love to play in tidepools and I love quiche. And Native American flute music under the stars? Romantic.
Did I mention the fine wine, scented oils bath, aromatherapy and massage?
    hungrily smiling here in memory

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7 posted 2002-12-29 06:27 PM


well I'll have to say..he's creative..hehe!! enjoyed!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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8 posted 2002-12-29 06:30 PM


I may have to borrow these lines and give them to my son. Maybe he can catch a sweetie with them!!

Hugs and Smiles, Marti

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9 posted 2002-12-29 07:45 PM


Oh boy, I once knew a man with lines this good. Swept right out to sea, I was. Nice memories, great poem.
Sandra

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10 posted 2002-12-29 07:55 PM


Midnite--I think those lines would have hooked me too...now does he believe in catch and release?  
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11 posted 2002-12-29 08:03 PM



You wrote a grin!

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12 posted 2002-12-30 07:17 PM


hook line and sinker...poetically speaking of course
great use of metaphor Kacy...so what did ya use for bait anyway

Will the wind remember the names it has blown in the past?
With this crutch, its old age and wisdom, it whispers no ... this will be the last.

jh

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13 posted 2002-12-30 11:18 PM


Grinning at your Q, JM. Why body poetry of course! as opposed to bawdy.
Ladies, we all enjoy a good creative line, don't we?  

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