On Losing One's Core: Internal Problematic

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Open Poetry #24

On Losing One's Core: Internal Problematic

OedipusSilenti
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since 2002-12-23

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0 posted 2002-12-28 12:25 PM

I am myself,
no intentional projection mortal,
no loss of limb of life of ambition.
Previous self,
only just prior, self-executed,
locked in open box metamorphism.
Been spent again,
this time 'round sickly woven sweat cocoon.
Built change, left without, transposed in your mind.
Is this transform?
No long-sufferd sigh spent Rigor Mortis?
no shore slapped, whore worn, weep waved right deeming?
Not what it seems.
Resolved to unabsolve your fancied whim.
Resolved to evolve in revelation.
My dementia,
only schizoid delusions packed and adressed:
From: apathetic me, To: stigmatic you.
Continue on.
Intellect free, bong heavy "Social Clique"
will be none the less for its dumbed down wear.
Sleep contented.
Sleep in complacency.
It is all that I desire.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2002-12-28 12:45 PM

kinda sad and eerie

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

2 posted 2002-12-28 11:20 PM

Desirous for oneself or others? If this is this, than here's to moving on.

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

3 posted 2002-12-28 11:48 PM

Oedipus,
Mind if I call you "Oed"?
I find this an interesting write(or rant)depending on ones' view-point. You seem to be stretching the bounds of convention in an effort to convey yourself and your thoughts as "other". At times being displaced from the mainstream is an exhilarating feeling, at others, it gets quite lonely. Be well in all your endeavors.
Doc

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

4 posted 2002-12-29 01:31 PM

excellent writing

your use of imagery, alliteration and assonance is superb

a breath of fresh air here, succinct and grabbing

i applaud you and will look for more of your work

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