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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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at cross purpose-- white on white-- Hyperion in satyr's sway back in the snow against backdrop of daylight breaking into gray. Pregnant ice against the pale of greenery kept too long... I stare through sheet of man's made splice condensating liquid pane... subtle grays and blues opaque I blanket me in blind of white horizon sky melds into fry-- white on white tears from the eye-- bleed clearly now into blind lie. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I stare through sheet of man's made splice condensating liquid pane... I love this line. it reminds me of one of my favourite lyrics " A man melts the sand so he can see the world outside.." U2 I cannot lie, this poem was cryptic and way over my muddled head. And yet I still had to reply because I adore your writing and this use of words. Would love to know what lies behind them. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I too adore your writing...it leaves me sometimes not knowing what to say really. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
loved the imagery, the use of the gods, sometimes i fall into the white too, and its just too blinding, i dont know if this echos anything youve even remotely written of, but this resonated in me, this way |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hey...this one ain't so deep. smile. Just me. On a Greyhound bus. Heading to Christmas after messing up bad. AGAIN. smile? |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity~ Whatever it's intended meaning, I really like this.  I may not always fully understand your poetry, but that doesn't stop it from ALWAYS speaking to me, and this was no exception. Wonderfully penned, as always. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
In blind of white.....a place where you can stare without thoughts. At least this is mine, and I do visit there alot. I told my sister to be sure and read your poetry. I really like your way of telling stories and bringing the reader along for the ride. Most Excellent! ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
The moon hits the sun. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, just wanted you to know that I'm reading and liking........like the others, I might not always understand your writing or your intended meaning, but I do always like it......I really do, Kare....... especially when you tell stories about your experiences...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi there, as always your words are formed into such interesting groups. You just have a way with them, ya know? Happy New YEar Sandra |
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