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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2002-12-22 12:39 PM

Shadows Flicker, Candles Fail

I dreamt of moons and rose red blooms,
of laughter ringing in the air.
In moonless, frigid, silent rooms
I dreamt of moons and rose red blooms.
Ice petals shatter, winter looms,
but still I sing in soft despair.
I dreamt of moons and rose red blooms,
of laughter ringing in the air.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2002-12-22 12:40 PM

Not only is this beautiful, but very unique.
I loved the softness of this and the repetition added to that gentleness. Just LOVELY!

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2002-12-22 12:44 PM

Thank you, Gentle Spirit. I appreciate it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2002-12-22 01:23 PM

Such a sweet lullabye Nan.
ThisDiamond

christian
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since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

4 posted 2002-12-22 02:02 PM

"shadows flicker, candles fail"

how awesome is that. and the poem wasnt
too shabby as well. cool.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2002-12-22 02:04 PM

Simply beautiful...A very tender write
with a wish, hope all comes true...

Nicely done Nan..

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-12-22 02:35 PM

(smiles) This is a gorgeous lullabye, sweet friend, I love the roseate blush of this, this felt so surreal to me, yay! (kiss on cheek) This is delightful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

7 posted 2002-12-22 02:58 PM

Soft and pretty and songlike.
Like this a great deal.

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

8 posted 2002-12-22 03:58 PM

WOW!!! This is excellent. I love the flow, the rhythmn, and the all over feel of this one

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2002-12-22 06:06 PM

Softly flickered. You never fail.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

10 posted 2002-12-22 07:36 PM

Thank you, Diamond. You're very kind.

Christian, I like the title better than the poem, myself.

Thank you, Magnus. I meant this one to be soft.

Hey, Noah! I can always count on you!

Thanks, Pat, 'pretty' is a compliment I always like to hear.

Hi, hoot-owl, I'm glad you like it.

Thank you, midnitesun, I rewrote this one several times before I was satisfied with it. I'm glad you like it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

11 posted 2002-12-22 07:46 PM

You have created a nice melody with this poem the way you have used this rhyme scheme and the well-placed repititions...it reads beautifully

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2002-12-23 03:35 AM

nice title, and good body

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

13 posted 2002-12-23 10:33 AM

Balladeer, Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it.

Passing Shadows, I love your name. I'm glad you like this little poem.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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