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ShadowRider
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0 posted 2002-12-22 11:42 AM




A Forgotten One

Crystalline etchings on pains
looking thru icy panes
Seclusion's eclipse obliterates inclusion
One set of silver -one place-setting
a candle with a dusty wick.
A single offer from another
would bestow a myriad of gratitudes
But the invitation does not come anymore.
The rocking chair taps a slow rhythm
to the reluctant ticking of a clock.
There is no solace in being the sole survivor
But there are solemn solitudes to endure.
She seeks not:sympathy or pity
Ah, but to be remembered!
That would be a great philanthropy
and so the fingernail scratches
on the frosted window:
samtsirhC yrreM
for none but
one
to see




© Copyright 2002 Picasso Lyrics - All Rights Reserved
Magnus
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1 posted 2002-12-22 11:46 AM


Somber yet a treasured write...Nicely done
Sir Jeff....Merry Christmas to you...

Barry

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2 posted 2002-12-22 11:47 AM


I really loved this!

Brought me to the mind of someone who just wanted someone to realise they were there for christmas...

And brilliant idea to put the Merry Christmas backwords as would be scratched from a window... much enjoyed!!!

Keep it up
Happy celebration of Jesus' birth to you and yours.
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -

ShadowRider
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3 posted 2002-12-22 11:52 AM


Hi Barry, and the merriest of Christmas's to you, also!  Much obliged for you stopping to read.  Thankx, Buddy!

Alyssa, pleased to meet your acquitance.  This was written as a gentle reminder, i suppose, to all of us who are bestowed with family to remember those who may not have that blessing, for whatever reason, any longer.  But, as you noticed, the Lady still felt the warmth to give cheer to others.  *smile*    Thank you, Alyssa!

Martie
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4 posted 2002-12-22 12:53 PM


Jeff

You see in windows of the heart, my friend, and write with a pen dipped in finest poetic intent.  Remarkable!

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5 posted 2002-12-22 12:57 PM


J,

What a clever fellow you are, I love the mirrored message. I do enjoy reading your creations and I'm really glad our paths have crisscrossed~ *S*


ATov~

~I envy those who have perfected the art of being~

~A Tone of Voice~

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2002-12-22 01:16 PM


Very creative fare for the holiday table Jeff. Thank you for this. ThisDiamond
Merry Christmas

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7 posted 2002-12-22 01:43 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Jeff, it breaks my heart to see so many this Christmas trying to find a reason to celebrate as so many children are without homes and my heart goes out to them in hope they can find a little love! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is heartfelt, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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8 posted 2002-12-23 04:42 AM


deep...wonderful write!
Marsha
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9 posted 2002-12-23 07:28 PM


Jeff darling heart I’m in here so much less these days, but you know that when I do come in I always look to see if you are about. I love it utterly utterly utterly, you craft a poem so well I can feel the scene so clearly. YOU really are an exceptional writer and this showcases your talent wonderfully.. This is just a quick reply. I thank you for this timely reminder, don’t look now sweets but you’re glowing with light. Truly exceptional darling man.

Happy Christmas to you, Dulcie and kisses on the noggin for the Batguy


Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

regards2you
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10 posted 2002-12-23 07:33 PM



Very creative and what a wonderful, touching reminder to remember those alone this season. Heartfelt.

Warm regards, and Happy Holidays to
you and yours.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

ShadowRider
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11 posted 2002-12-23 08:52 PM


Martie, the finest of words come from treasured
experience, and in my life....sigh.. i have been blessed with stories gilded in joy.
Thank you so much, Martie.  You are such an inspiration to us all.

ATOV, I have NEVER (oh, sorry, NEVAHHH in my best suthen voice) regreted that our lives have intersected.  More than once i have given wish that you and I and D were closer in miles.  Perhaps that is all the more reason to get closer in heart.  ~huuuugg~
Jeff

ShadowRider
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12 posted 2002-12-23 08:56 PM


TD  Hiya!  It is with much regret that sooo often i fail to acknowledge the respect i have for so many of the poets here, and you are atop the list of the most talented.  Thank you, and know that the slight is only due to my lack of time.  Bad Jeff, bad!!!!!!

Noah....dang..... what would Christmas be without a home??  Yet, when adults are youngest, their fortunes fail them the quickest and the hardest.  It is with this sorrow i feel for them, that this poem was born.  You, being the angel you are, i am sure will do your best to lift their hearts.
Thank you both, so much!  
May you both be blessed in abundance this holiday season.
Jeff

ShadowRider
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13 posted 2002-12-23 09:01 PM


to:
passing shadows from a ShadowRider:  a deep poem is always the result of deep inspiration.  
And i thank you for your kindness!

Maaaaaaasha:  I Can't begin to tell you how tickled I am to see you here!  You tell the world how to speak from the heart with your hearth-warm words.  Perhaps, if i am verry verrrry lucky, i will someday learn to speak that language, also.!

Regards2U, what a perfect name for this time of season, where smiles are adored and read like a favorite book by strangers passing.
The best prayers and wishes to you also!

Merry Christmas, Y'all!
Make it so!
Jeff

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