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Daughter of the Wind (Inspiration thanks to Wind)
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Daughter of the Wind (Inspiration thanks to Wind) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I'd like to dedicate this poem to our young poet friend, Wind. She replied to a poem of mine and her words touched my heart. It's the time of year to give each other gifts - and her words were a gift to me (I'm sure she didn't even realize it). So I wanted to give her something in return. She is such a sweetie!! Daughter of the Wind Chapter in the Immortal Clan Series With cries in storm on winter’s night Her newborn frailty was shone In the lightness of her flaxen hair And the thinness of her bone Her mother knew she would not die For immortal she was born Life would be hard for such as she A child tiny and forlorn Her mother turned away in pain As the dawn eased into day But the child did not give up As the forest began to sway A mighty force blew about An assault of nature’s force It seemed the child thrived upon A windy wayward course Her tiny hand escaped the fur As she was cradled by the fire Wind blew around the Immortal Clan she showed them life’s desire Drawing strength from raging wind That hurled about her on this night Her arm waved with sudden force Her cries no longer slight In ceremony of their tradition They gave her name - Wind’s Grace thus she traveled to womanhood in this immortal place. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
beautiful.. needs to be read again and again I am sure she will love it. ~~I Love You~~ |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharon, this is so beautiful I am sure that our little Liz will think so, too.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
awww i love this...... Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I remember you did one with a phrase I was stuck on, "mystic moons guide my way" I think it was  really love the Immortal Clan ones this one is awesome [This message has been edited by SEA (12-22-2002 01:23 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 fine work! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, this is such a beautiful gift to our dearest friend Liz, sweet friend, I love it! (kiss on cheek) She is a wonderful friend and poetess and I know she will grow with a golden heart that shares with all, sweet friend, you are a dear friend to us all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Beautiful, and I think you captured her will just perfectly. Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
I like the rhyme scheme I like the first quatrain that this poem begins with I also like the image of a swaying forest. I was picturing a forest doing the hula-hoops.  "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak [This message has been edited by winston (12-22-2002 02:45 PM).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful!!!! and worth to read it over and over, hope you don't mind the thread to my library, right Charisma |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is really Beautiful m'friend. Maree adding to my library. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is too strong for pretty, but I love the images, the forest, the wind, the baby's cries. Well done! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon~ A beautiful and powerful write, my friend. Very nicely done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady DeVine... a most beautiful piece. A good orgin for a larger story. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is lovely - as is your dedication... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I can't believe I just found this! Thanks so much!!! no one's ever dedicated anything to me!It was beautifull. the Wind is invisible. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
yanno? What did i say that made you write this? i'll say it more often if it makes people write something this great  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It was just you and your spirit. I admire your spunk! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
hehe..spunk. thanks a lot..sometimes I come in here and read this |
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