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darkling
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since 2001-08-28
Posts 90
altered state of mind

0 posted 2002-12-21 08:31 PM


Rain falling from her sky
blue eyes that will never look
at me the same
Unknowingly have I forced upon her
the same emotions that struck me down
I have shared that pain
that same maks of fear
that desolate thought of abandonment
There is nothing I can do for her
but tell her that I have been there before
And the hurt will end
If only she would believe in her own
Salvation

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enchantingvamp
Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214
Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas!
1 posted 2002-12-21 08:47 PM


Wow, I like it....I just wish I was better at expressing how it affects me....
Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
2 posted 2002-12-21 09:01 PM


darkling - I enjoyed your writing. Nice write...

BC

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
3 posted 2002-12-21 10:43 PM


Certainly an excellent write...disturbing...
ThisDiamond

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
4 posted 2002-12-23 04:50 AM


that's all you can do....that's enough.
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