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dhicks03
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0 posted 2002-12-28 04:28 AM





She said "I can reach you, Please let me try"
He said "You just don't know love, I'm so far away"
She said, "I watched you sleep, you were so free, innocent"
He said "I dreamed of you, with me always, this way"
She said, "I see so much in your eyes, happy, yet sad in a way,
And I feel in your touch, more love than I thought ever possible"
He whispered "I love you"
She whispered "I love you too"


He watched her back to sleep
She knew he would go, far away...never to return


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1 posted 2002-12-28 04:44 AM


geesh!

I was ready for bed...now I wanna read more and write some.

dhicks03
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2 posted 2002-12-28 04:48 AM


LOL, I was going to bed two hours ago...
Nan
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3 posted 2002-12-29 08:16 AM


You have a lovely way of expressing the sometimes bittersweet state of love... Nicely done, Dennis..
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4 posted 2002-12-29 08:34 AM



I am going to enjoy
watching the poetry of you
unfold...

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5 posted 2002-12-29 08:59 AM


Very nicely done....with words that have
crossed my lips...as I said...

Well written,  might inspire others...this
I would certainly feel...  Welcome to PiP..

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6 posted 2002-12-29 11:19 AM


Lovely!
dhicks03
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7 posted 2002-12-29 05:49 PM


Thank to all for your warm comments.
JamesMichael
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8 posted 2003-01-21 01:25 AM


Nice writing...James
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9 posted 2003-01-21 02:13 AM


Dennis, I like the way you did this. It's really pretty.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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10 posted 2003-01-22 02:11 AM



Dennis~
This is so beautifully penned...much enjoyed.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

dhicks03
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11 posted 2003-01-22 11:03 PM


Thank you all for your kind words, they made my day!
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