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Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05
Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

0 posted 2002-12-20 06:24 AM


When time's harsh and unsympathetic hand
gently replaces day with dusk;
When the night lights twinkle under a serene sky,
and the stars come out to play volleyball
with the full and benevolent moon...

When the sound of waves reminds me
of the endless cycles of life,
where inspiration fills my heart
and poetry suffuses the air I breathe;
bringing the two oxygen molecules together
in a lover's embrace...

When a rainbow colours my world
and people discuss destiny and life,
and books and dreams...
Not nightclubs and fashion
and how drunk they got and how much they hate their parents.

And that moment when all of life's worries
melt into the healing place between
two soulmates eyes who understand...

When time's harsh and unsympathetic hand
gently replaces day with dusk;
when the night lights twinkle under a serene sky
and the stars come out to remind me
that I am a tiny but essential beat
in an endless cosmic rhythm...

This is my belonging place.
This is my home.

NB: and PiP is so much like this that it's scary. Thank God!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

© Copyright 2002 Shireen - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2002-12-20 06:29 AM


Shireen this is a wonderful write.  I can't really pick a fav line because I like the entire peice.  It has a lot of solid ideas in it.  Good write!
regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
2 posted 2002-12-20 06:49 AM



Shireen,

"My Belonging Place", your title captures your sentiment perfectly.
I like this a great deal.


Hugs,  Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

winston
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since 2002-12-19
Posts 204
NW of Eden
3 posted 2002-12-20 07:12 AM


Wow, this one blew me away. Well, my antipodean cousin, I got an undulating sensation as I read it. I am awestruck and speechless. I will come back with "any tips for improvement" when I have had a thorough perusal of it. :-))

[This message has been edited by winston (12-20-2002 07:14 AM).]

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
4 posted 2002-12-20 07:36 AM


i enjoyed  your poetic vision,

Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2002-12-20 10:51 AM


you paint quite the place... hope you find it where it truly resides..inside..

enjoyed

Rainbowdust
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6 posted 2002-12-20 08:43 PM


Thank you all for sharing your reactions.
garysgirl
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7 posted 2002-12-20 10:12 PM


I really like this "home away from home" very much, too. I like the way you wrote about it.  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Midnitesun
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Gaia
8 posted 2002-12-20 10:51 PM


Outstanding. I am delighted to be able to read things like this.
If I never before said welcome, I do now.
I look forward to reading more from you.

May ripples of LOVE
become waves of PEACE

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