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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2002-12-19 11:56 PM



It all came in a box...
no a sealed cardboard package
better still a shoestring tied,
daily newspaper wrapped and sealed parcel...
dumped on a snow piled doorway..

a knobby kneed child lifted the box
the newspaper wrapped parcel that is..
and examined its identity
was this a gift that came from her dad
who was separated from her Mom?
they'd exchange Xmas gifts
and their relationship would linger
between the multiple wrappings
of unmarked packages....

it all came from a box
slowly its sheathing would unfurl
and wet paper tape uncurl
together with the broken promises
of an absent parent
who took pride in excessive wrappings
and offered his daughter trivial trappings.


© Copyright 2002 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2002-12-20 01:00 AM


How sad. It is amazing how many children experience this miserable moment. Far better to visit and play with the child in the park for even 10 minutes, than to send a package. A good write about a sad subject.
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
2 posted 2002-12-20 01:17 AM



You've captured the disappointment in a childs eyes and your words touch on a sad sad subject~

Enjoy your Holidays ecrivan~

ecrivan
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3 posted 2002-12-20 12:54 PM


while lots of you are dabbling in the happy/humorous stuff it's good to see what hits the chronically sad child,


Enjoy your holidays too Midnite and Blues, thanks for sharing.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-20-2002 12:55 PM).]

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