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lukeyd
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since 2002-12-19
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0 posted 2002-12-19 10:30 AM


I'm sweating out the thoughts that come into my head.
Like the juice dripping down my chin from an orange.
Taking a bite from life and enjoying it to the fullest.
Not knowing or caring about what the future holds.
Counting to ten with my one eye closed and one still open.
Peeking out the corner of it to see what is there.
Not supposing that all is good but not bad either.
Thanking God for the things that are easy for my life.
Living, loving, learning and going on with my life as usual.
Wanting to run with all the rest of the animals.
To fly free like the birds above my head in the clouds.
I am free though, free to be myself all along.
I have my thoughts figured in my head but not on paper.
Garbled and broken they seem, but they are for real.
I love life and I want to continue living it forever.
Live life with me happily.

----Lukey-D----

© Copyright 2002 Luke D Wilson - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
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1 posted 2002-12-19 10:40 AM


I loved this write.  Its theme carried me along the entire way through.  
Welcome to Passions!  I am most certainly looking forward to more from you.  Enjoy your time here.

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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2 posted 2002-12-19 11:00 AM


I'm really enjoying what i'm seeing. this poem was full of senses. i could taste that orange! i like the thoughts within this poem. its so true isn't it, you have everything figured out in your head, but when you say, or write them, they seem to make no sense at all. but as far as this poem goes, to me, it makes perfect sense. looking forward to reading more from you!
lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
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3 posted 2002-12-19 11:01 AM


Me too!

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

passing shadows
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4 posted 2002-12-19 03:08 PM


me three! good stuff!
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5 posted 2002-12-19 05:11 PM


Amen....I love the last two sentences, especially....  
I'm glad to see you here Lukey-D and hope to read more from you......  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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