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Dreams Or Reality |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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Closing my eyes in sleep I feel your presence around me Between the realm of dreams and reality there is a touch, ever so lightly A caress, softly, tenderly, lovingly as I'm into sleep, falling I can feel your breath gently in my ear, my name you're calling Very softly, you say "I love you" with words so tender you speak And with the touch of your hand you very, very gently seek With such passion and love in your voice I can hear With longing and want in it you nibble on my ear As I drift slowly into sleep your handsome face I see With deep brown eyes gazing lovingly at me And I hear your soft whisper "Sleep, my Love, I'm right here Just feel and you'll see, together we are, for I'm always near" I then sleep soundly and peacefully as his sweet presence I feel With his arms holding me tightly I lay beside him, very still When I finally let myself awake counting the hours, I start For the day is nearly here, when I feel the beat of my Love's heart [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-19-2002 10:14 AM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
"i dont get? where's the poetry? this is just a fact, undecorated. you should expand on it, c'mon girl, use your mechanics, imagery, metaphor, foundation...give it some spunk...then or..wait a minute...how about "this is a little better, I'm not going to attack its format, cause for all i know, (which obviously isn't a whole hell of a lot) i can almost feel the emotions..(I'll bet he can't feel the "EMOTIONS" from some that his crude remarks/replies have brought)...so, peace, love and cheesecake from the new local "fruitcake"....LOL Sweet poem gal....as ALL of your's are...if you get one of "those" (supposedly professional) critiques by our new expert, just remember Toerag's not a poet, doesn't claim to be...but I can take some critiques and expertly show people where they can put them ...luvya Toe |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
lol at toerag!! another beauty ethel, oooooh aren't those deep brown eyes the best!you know i love this romantic stuff. especially when i know i'm going to get to see my brown eyed handsome man today! thanks for making me all the more excited. keep sharing this magical stuff! lots of love , gemma xxxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Such a peaceful feeling flowing with these words. Sleep tight my friend & when it's time to wake...you have the perfect alarm clock *S*. Nicely Done Ethel ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
garysgirl A beautiful write and a lovely feeling, enjoyed. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When the dreams and reality blend and become one, you're a lucky lady indeed. *S* I like this very much, gg... and I have as little patience as Toe does with self-professed experts who want to turn PIP into the same kind of slam-fests most of us prefer to avoid. *S* Keep writing... I'll keep reading. *S* |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Well done!!! Love the feeling this gives you! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
THANK YOU MR. TOE.......YOU SAID IT VERY WELL !!!!!  But, don't be too hard on him. I read in one of his replies to someone else that he's just a "jean wearing teen-ager" (or something like that). I did apologize to him for losing my temper, though. Like I told him, the comments made to me, personally, don't upset and bother me as much as the comments made to my "family of friends" here at PIP. I knew that ya'll would get the "PIP possee" out, though. I thank all of you sweet "family" here for being such good friends to me. I know that I'm not really a "poet", but I do like to get my feelings out in writings (or whatever they're called). Again, my dear friend (family), I thank you for your love and concern...... "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh yes, Gemjop, I love his dark brown eyes. What makes it so good, is that when I gaze into his eyes, I see just as much love reflected back to me as i have for him. Isn't it wonderful to have such a love? Yesh, I love to read romantic poems, too..... "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Salty  Thank you for reading and for your sweet reply. I appreciate your friendship, Lady. "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Mr. Seymour. You are such a distinguished gentleman....in your poetry and your replies. You are so sweet. "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you so much, sweet Suthern Lady. I really do appreciate all of you sweet, loving people here at this wonderful "home" we've found here. I love the atmosphere here....that's why I stay here so much. It's a calm, peaceful place. I really thank Ron and all the rest of you for making it this way.  That sweet Mr. toe is something else, isn't he? He loves to joke and kid around, but there's not a mean bone in his body. I don't like to think there is in mine, either, but I don't like for my "family of friends" to get hurt..... Thank you all.... "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-19-2002 02:14 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Bob. I'm glad that you like the feeling it gave you, and I than you for reading and replying, too.. I appreciate it. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
GARYSGIRL...thanks for the fine words about me....but let our newcomer keep his current personality flaw....Everyone knows whatta nice guy I am...right?....But...I too have one itty bitty personality flaw too....I'm sure it won't have to show itself here too many times....Didn't they throw the "christians" to the lions in the Bible?.... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Toerag, you are a mess. Yeah everybody here knows what a nice guy you are and that you wouldn't hurt anybody intentionally for the world.........unless, of course, that person hurt one of your "family of friends"....... ~Ethel~ |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
You have mail!!!! (I'll be you didn't know I could imitate the AOL jerk did ya?) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ROTFL at Toerag. Enjoyed the poem, will be back later to partake of more poetry. Hi ho, it's off to work I go. |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
omg! like! this is sooo good! you are a great writer! omg! beautiful! wow! breathtaking! outstanding! i love it! |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
there see, now you can feel good about yourself. right toerag? great this, great that, i love this i love that, you'd probably even give positive criticism to a shriveled worm on the street. psh. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Christian...good job!!...Now that didn't hurt a bit did it?....Now then, let's see, take this BS....mix it up with reality, add a little of this knowledge of poetry you claim to have, add a touch of class and tact, then reply like a considerate human being, without just cutting the legs out from someone, and you'll fit in just fine here, (and most everywhere else for that matter)...the people here are very nice and forgiving and accepting....other than my silly advice and smart ass comments to you, everyone else has responded to you fairly well I'd say. I think most here are trying as hard as they can to accept you, and even advise you somewhat before the moderators delete you? You're obviously not a total dumb ass...your poetry and "way" with words confirm this....so don't act like what you're not..you'll find alot of nice folks here that will go out of their way to enjoy you, in most cases will like you and your work...so why blow it?...I guess like you so eloquently stated: "That you're the most honest person you'll find in this world"...I'm the most outspoken smart assed person you'll ever meet in this world...and it's because I don't give a rat's ass what anyone thinks about me...So give us chance boy...you'll enjoy it here.... [This message has been edited by Toerag (12-19-2002 05:46 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This peaceful little platypus is popping in to peruse this popular poet's pretty poetry! ---Pure pleasure! Warm hugs, Linda |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I just did worm....LOL |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey, Toerag..... Gary says THANK YOU VERY MUCH, MR. TOE I guess it's kind of good that Gary doen't have a computer to read our very pleasant, kind, considerate, courteous, and loving newcomer's remarks, don't you? ~Ethel P.S. Maybe he's starving for attention???? [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-19-2002 06:31 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
HEY CHRISTIAN... I DON'T NEED ANY OF YOUR REMARKS TO MAKE ME FEEL GOOD ABOUT MYSELF. IF YOU HAD TAKEN TIME TO GO TO THE BACK PAGES OF THE POETRY PAGES, YOU WOULD SEE FROM MY OTHER POEMS (OR WHATEVER YOUR O-P-I-N-I-O-N IS THAT I WRITE) THAT I FEEL GOOD ABOUT MYSELF ALREADY. I TOLD YOU BEFORE, BUT I'LL TELL YOU AGAIN, IF YOU DON'T MIND.....I COULD REALLY CARE LESS WHAT YOU THINK OF ME OR MY POEMS (WRITINGS), BUT WHEN YOU START ATTACKING MOST OF THE OTHER FINE TALENTS YOU HAVE READ HERE WITH YOUR OPINIONS AND REMARKS, THAT BOTHERS ME A WHOLE LOT. I TRULY HOPE THAT YOU HAVE A GOOD DAY AND LIFE, BECAUSE YOU MUST BE A VERY UNHAPPY PERSON, OR YOU ARE STARVING FOR ATTENTION.....I HAVEN'T FIGURED OUT WHICH ONE IT IS, YET!!!!!!! Ethel.......garysgirl.......OR WHATEVER ELSE YOUR LITTLE HEART WANTS TO CALL ME. [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-19-2002 06:52 PM).] |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
hahaha .. wow. this is the first place where my honesty has gotten me in trouble--if so many people are getting irritated by the translucence of my comments, then okay, i'll swallow my pride and tone it down a bit--to a point where you people think it's 'not rude', and i still have yet to figure out how i am being rude. i lay down what i feel and i stick some constructive criticism with it. you people frazzle me. ive already received about 7 emails from members on this site telling me how i need to stop the way i am commenting on poems. soo, okay. i never meant to harm anyone's feelings with my critiques. i come from a poetry club where criticism is open and invited, positive or negative. so, i'm used to commenting on poems without the sugar. i am concrete. always will be, but since you guys have totally distorted my intent- ions--i'll keep a kinder mindset with my replies. take it easy fragile friends. -chris. |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
toerag: i never claimed any knowledge of poetry. i could also give a rats ass about you. well, i guess youre one person i can argue with here without having to worry about making you cry. i'm a journalism major/english minor, it's second nature for me to analyze poems. forgive my being. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well...I will just say that I enjoyed the poem...and leave the rest alone |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I know just how you feel and believe with all my hear it won't be too much longer when I have my Joanna and kiss her for the first time! (kiss on cheek) I'm so sorry I couldn't read this earlier, I was out of the house all day with my dad celebrating the holidays together and am now up to my late-night rally! Believe in your dreams and they will all come true, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Actually Chris..all we ask here is for some tact in your critique. Maybe, or obviously, your poetry club does ask for "to the point" critiques..and, we have that board here, it's just not on this forum. I think you'd probably really enjoy that board, have you checked it out yet?... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Well, Christian, let's just make a truce, because I love this place and the people here too much to let ANYBODY run me off. So, let's just agree not to say ANYTHING to each other, okay? That doesn't mean that I won't read your poetry, because I do think your last poem is pretty good, actually. but, I won't say if I thought there was anything wrong with it because this isn't the forum to do that. Just one small thing before I shut up about all this...... You didn't make me cry, Sir, because I've had enough things happen in my life that I've learned not to cry over all the little stuff............ Oh, and thank you for reading and replying to my poem, along with all my other "family of friends" here at Passions In Poetry. "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-20-2002 10:11 AM).] |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
i am the thrift store wearing, faded jean guitar playing teenager that listens to nirvana. but i'm not immature in the least. i came here thinking it was okay for me to critique poetry, and thats all--not knowing that people here don't invite honest negative criticism. i'm mature enough to learn the nature of things, and i'm quick enough to adapt to things. and no, i will comment on your poetry. just, in a more considerate type of way. -chris. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Everything's good, Chris...... So, you can say whatever you want to. It's okay. You just kinda shocked me by the way you made your entrance. But, I'm not going to rehash all that, because I'm also mature enough not to. By the way, that's why I wrote the poem of apology.....because of the fact that I acted in a very immature way in this thread. I could have gotten the same points I wanted to get across, but in a much calmer and more considerate way........ From the first day I came here, everyone had been nothing but kind, considerate, loving and compassionate, and I felt that I should apologize to them for my unkind words. That's it, Chris...nothing more and nothing less...... Have a good day..... ~Ethel~` |
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