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lukeyd Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 11 |
I look out my window and see the leaves falling softly to the ground. I envy them because I did not fall so soft when I fell for you. I know that we all must love and lose, but why did I lose you? What can I do to regain my footing and be yours once again? I fell from your love, but I did not fall out of love for you. I wish that I could fly with these wings that you gave me. But they are chained to you, as you still have my heart. The leaves float down to the earth to join my thoughts. My thoughts are no longer above and at ease like when I was yours. My heart is drowning in the tears that have slowly formed an ocean. Soon enough I will be out of my misery and out of your mind. Alas though, I am already out of your mind, which is why I am dead. ----Lukey-D---- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Such a sad first write. Welcome to Passions, where you will find there is much to read, and explore, and study! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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lukeyd Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 11 |
Thanks for lookin at this piece. It is much appreciated. Peace. ----Lukey-D---- |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. Hope to see more of your works. Emotive first write, seeped in sadness. Chin up, within the ocean, hope will surface... ThisDiamond |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS Lukey-D I hope you enjoy it here. this is a wonderful place to join in with a "family of friends". This was a very emotional first post, with lots of heart in it. It was very beautiful, but also very sad. I hope that you feel much better soon, because the hurt seemed to be very strong. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Good luck and best wishes.  "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-19-2002 09:37 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Much enjoyed your first post, albeit a sad one. I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~ |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
"Alas though" sounds a bit laboured, but otherwise, this poem has the potential to be the starting point for more poems excelling what's been expressed here. Thanks for letting me participate in this. "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to Pips. I enjoyed these falling leaves, though I doubt you enjoyed the fall. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
lukeyd A start is a start, welcome, enjoyed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I think that way sometimes too. Welcome to Passions, please share more.  |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
"I look out my window and see the leaves falling softly to the ground. I envy them because I did not fall so soft when I fell for you." thats going into my poetry book, no contest. i'll tell you what though, the poem started out strong--brilliant. but, to me, it just zigzagged downhill. i dont blame you. those first two lines are masterpeice. -chris. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Luke, this is such a heartachingly beautiful debut, sweet friend, you have come to the right place as we all feel dead at times but find life and solace through the compassion we share, God Bless You, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Luke, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Luke, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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