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GOlDsparklESS
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0 posted 2002-12-19 12:35 PM


My screams are fierce fires scorching wind.  
The fury felt is palpable, tastes of chasing shadows.
Love given in a cavern shifts emotions;
An omni hollow embrace.  
I offer a prayer to you,
O’ nameless grace…
Hand’s folded motions move to
Light a candle for a child.

Trials of woe,
stray bullet soliloquy
Events uphold banners-
Tragedy

shaking a tower
disarrays a nation
subliminal motivation-

Let’s topple Power
and instigate
World Obliteration

doves to ashes..
slashed lives

angels could not
Contrive
to open our eyes..

eyes fraught with the past

© Copyright 2002 Manisha Narang - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-12-20 11:05 AM


Ok..I need some help here. I've read this numerous times and can take from it a possible meaning, Can you tell me the intent of what you want to convey here? There are some good lines...and some sharp short images... I just stumble on the true intent of what you want to convey...
GOlDsparklESS
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2 posted 2002-12-20 12:44 PM


My screams are fierce fires scorching wind.  
The fury felt is palpable, tastes of chasing shadows.
Love given in a cavern shifts emotions;
An omni hollow embrace.  
.  meaning shifts from stanza to stanza,  but the central theme is the shocking awareness that comes from realizing the complexity of collective Consciousness. I (speaker) am retaining the integrity of intense emotions in the face of chasing shadows- a metaphor for emptiness, then conveying the cold indifferent quality of this cavern(a vast, pervading consciousness), it feels like an omni hollow embrace..

I offer a prayer to you,
O’ nameless grace…
Hand’s folded motions move to
Light a candle for a child.

(I am a child of a purely spiritual faith, my prayers ( folded motions implies praying hands)- light a candle for a child/ I pray for the innocence which has not been absorbed by the void)

Trials of woe,
stray bullet soliloquy
Events uphold banners-
Tragedy
(collectively, we seem to enjoy emblazing newspapers with tragedy; a bullet, in a sense, tells a story- or anything else for that matter)

shaking a tower
disarrays a nation
subliminal motivation-
(consciousness of terrorism)

Let’s topple Power
and instigate
World Obliteration
(Belligerence)

doves to ashes..
slashed lives
(doves are metaphors for peace)

angels could not
Contrive
to open our eyes…

eyes fraught with the past
(much conflict on our planet derives from the past, including our attachments to outdated beliefs and demonstrably harmful ways of life )

I didn’t intend on what I wrote to be so complex, but this is how it came out.  I hope my somewhat articulate ramblings have enlightened you.  Thanks.  

EagleScorpion
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3 posted 2002-12-23 03:47 PM


ASHES TO ASHES

ELEVEN BELLS

FALLEN ANGELS

THIS WORLD GOES TO HELL.

------------------------

an omni- hollow embrace....

i see you were in another bad mood.

i hope that writing this has released some of that anger.

Dont worry, it doesnt have to make sense, for that is the beauty of poetry.

no need to elaborate.. i already understand..

I have sent you nothing but angels, and I have placed nothing but miracles before you.

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